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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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It happens That a thought will occur to me about mud and porcelain Or charcoal and diamond And with it The certainty that a poem is in there somewhere That it needs only to be uncovered On some rare occasions It lies just under the surface Or is sitting there glistening At the bottom of a stream of consciousness Wanting only to be plucked But now And more frequently Thoughts of clay and statuary Are found deeper and deeper in the strata Like the fossil remains of some great beast Awaiting pick and shovel to unearth them Before they can be polished and arranged Into some semblance of sense So, if you need me You can find me in the Badlands I’ll be the perplexed looking fellow Squatting at the rim of the excavation From which these words were mined Peering into the darkness for the spine That will hold them all together "In looking Northward, I see a light" |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I have missed your writings dear wranx. Thankyou for this excellent piece. Chris  "At one glance |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think you found it. This is a different perspective on writing than I've seen. You have me shaking my head YES with you!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Wow! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Incredible write here! So pleased to see you back. Hugs~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx, Excellent. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
.....Mmmmmmm....Nicely wranxed -- My complements nto the chef! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks friends, just been having a little trouble with the muse. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Muse trouble? You ARE a muse, ye hermit. This is digging up bones, indeed, yeti...  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nicely done...I'm tempted to say that I dig your dig, but I didn't want to be corny...good write with a perfect analogy |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I like the methphor... sometimes it is difficult to see the treasure far below the surface. Keep digging.... and don't forget the little brush for when you are up close and personal. |
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dingusjr Member
since 2003-09-24
Posts 415Missouri |
WOW..."listening to tiny bones that click together faintly in the earth" THANKS, Larry |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
where ya been? You've been missed! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes...this is the kind of writing I've been waiting for...thank you Sir! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wranx Some times it feel just like this. I really enjoyed this! Hugs to your muse, and you too! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
At the risk of being accused of stating a double entendre, I love the feeling of old bones. I live near a lignite bed which sometimes yields interesting things. Close by there is a stream bed which frequently gives up ancient sharks' teeth and one of my favorites is the fireplace I built with black marble which is chock full of fossils, mostly trilobites and plants. When I touch fossils, I try to imagine life in general in those alien worlds. I can't, but it is fun to try. Thanks for the images. [This message has been edited by icebox (02-13-2004 10:59 AM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Varuch Elohim Junior Member
since 2003-11-10
Posts 41Italy |
Excellent |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ed.. it does indeed appear we have been on the same expedition and uncovering perhaps those things that lie a bit deeper... enjoyed this... and a better say to the whole than my own feeble attempt... I don't comment much anymore... found it to be a risk I didn't need to take.. but this deserves a comment.. and a nod stay warm on the river sir.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I’ll be the perplexed looking fellow Squatting at the rim of the excavation From which these words were mined Absolutely excellent! *S* It's good to read your work again! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It happens That a thought will occur to me about mud and porcelain Or charcoal and diamond And with it The certainty that a poem is in there somewhere That it needs only to be uncovered ====================== But now And more frequently Thoughts of clay and statuary Are found deeper and deeper in the strata Like the fossil remains of some great beast Awaiting pick and shovel to unearth them Before they can be polished and arranged Into some semblance of sense =================================== Squatting at the rim of the excavation From which these words were mined Peering into the darkness for the spine That will hold them all together ================================== oh man I love this write...what a superb poetic employ of theme, metaphor and imagery. me thinks you struck gold with this one poet sir...one I wish I had wrote. me thinks me me muse ran off with an archeologist.  excellent penning poet sir...good to see your name here today. Well I cant say what I might believe ... |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
This is a diamond unearthed. Wonderful!! |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I'm just envisioning you sitting perplexed at what you have uncovered...sitting and pondering for days a glimpse of some idea until finally it hits you and you get it. Awesome poem! Thanks for putting words to my stance as I sit and sit until I find the spine. Hope you find many more spines, and then share them! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Avant garde! Grover. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I’ll be the perplexed looking fellow Squatting at the rim of the excavation From which these words were mined Peering into the darkness for the spine That will hold them all together" I loved those lines!! and..I know the feeling all too well.. Nice to "see" you! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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