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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Some night I will write to you of wildflowers dancing in fields-- heavy skies, &autumns chill to make me fragile to you- to your hands touch -- as soft as your eyes that gaze my heart Somewhere, someone will paint pictures of us, along the rivers edge -- naked sand and water pure forms flowing read for me your soul "It begins here" from lines of these pages soaked in amber's hue stay with me a little while the night is young tomorrow start your journey with-out me I, will pray tomorrow never comes ~~**~~ Greatly Inspired & Muse Dedicated ~~**~~ You read before you words I write- See before you my soul, spinning on waves of thought, painting memories of time [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-10-2004 09:27 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your muse should be smiling... I am!  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I think maybe, if I am lucky I too will see that smile....  lady thank you for your smile...~~**~~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And I too am smiling pretty lady~  Hugs~ ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugsss Nancy.....thank you for your smile as well... pretty lady...~~**~~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Somewhere, someone will paint pictures of us, along the rivers edge -- naked sand and water pure forms flowing " Lauren -- this was really profoundly lovely! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is soooo lovely! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...you are grace in words! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
awww, this is a sad'n... but pretty, yes, pretty. soft, smooth, and with a very cool title tied in to the theme as a whole. a kipper for sure. one suggestion: change "with out" to "with-out" you. I'm assuming you separated it intentionally to set it apart - and it works that way, but looks like a grammatical error. (2 pennies worth is all).  hope you find that smile. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
to make me fragile to you- to your hands touch -- as soft as your eyes that gaze my heart Somewhere, someone will paint pictures of us, along the rivers edge -- naked sand and water pure forms flowing read for me your soul "It begins here" from lines of these pages soaked in amber's hue stay with me a little while the night is young tomorrow start your journey with-out me =======================================  "As I'm leaving A change comes on my eyes These streets persuading me With mumbled strange goodbyes Through the water Through the rain To the soul of everything Throw my heart out on the stones And I'm almost gone Through the water Through the rain To the soul of everything Throw my memories to the wind And I'm almost gone" David Gray   The work of language deserves our greatest care ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
read for me your soul "It begins here" from lines of these pages soaked in amber's hue That's a nice shade on you, Lauren~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh what a feeling |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
“read for me your soul "It begins here" from lines of these pages soaked in amber's hue stay with me a little while the night is young tomorrow start your journey with-out me I, will pray tomorrow never comes” So would I... And the next day either, for that matter... This was wonderful Lauren! And I love your new picture Very Pretty! |
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