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Nothing is as it Seems
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Nothing is as it Seems |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Betwixt the layered wisps of heaven’s strands The silent stillness of transient veneer Echoes lines of smoke-filled bands As whispered breaths of winds appear To wash the mindless clutter there Distilling dust from absent air The knight of sons so long ago When dawn of dusk seemed far aloft The ill-timed fate of vertigo Inclined itself to answers soft Forlorn, and yet unspent— Those lines are ripped and rent In twain, the sacred scars of sear-ed thought Are borne by those unborn of night As catcher’s dreams are yet unsought And eyes are filled with soil-ed light Bereft of soul’s desire or fancied dreams Nothing now, as then, is as it seems Life appears and then recedes in schemes Where nothing now is as it seems. |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Mmmm... I enjoyed the kind of fantasy feel to it... "The knight of sons so long ago When dawn of dusk seemed far aloft..." Of course, I am not sure thats what you were going for. Anyways, I blather on. Excellent write, and much enjoyed. One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Rdz9, you are very much on target |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Got dang brother! This was sweet! Steaven, did anyone ever tell you, that you’re one heck of a writer? They have? Good! Well, I’m gonna tell you anyway This was fantastic! Great Job   |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
oh oh ohhhhh.... i loved every bit of this.. how it just danced on the tongue and gave a twirl in the air so i could see ... soooo niiiice... loved it. snow "yet each man kills the thing he loves |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Richy, your praises are far too generous...thank you, though Snow, wow...3 ohs...I am flattered...thank you oh, oh, oh so kindly  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done! I loved the last lines! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
steaven, this is absolutely beautiful!! Just beautiful!!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very well written, and enjoyable read and lesson here...thank you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Steaven~ This was a gentle read ... a dip of your quill in magic ink~ 'In twain, the sacred scars of sear-ed thought Are borne by those unborn of night As catcher’s dreams are yet unsought And eyes are filled with soil-ed light Bereft of soul’s desire or fancied dreams Nothing now, as then, is as it seems' See it ? See it ? Magic~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It does have a good roll across the tongue, Sir... I enjoyed this one very much. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very well written. I enjoyed it alot! Grover. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
passing shadows, glad you like that part…it was the real of the surreal garysgirl, thank you…as your writing is always beautiful, I consider that a welcome comment LeeJ, thank you and I am so glad that poetry can speak on so many different levels Marge, glad you caught the magic…that was a bit of the intent Sunshine, I love the words…any words…thank you Grover, thanks for reading and commenting |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Inspired writing, Steavenr! Truly! |
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