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Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2004-01-25 01:33 PM

The cautionary lamenting of a brutally ruined harvest,
sings desperately from the wind of the piccolo.
The flashy, lightning urge exploding the rattles raspy voice.
In the cold, damp mind of the strategist.
The grandest grains obedient, in salty foreclosure.
A rusted rain filled brimming cannister,
majestically, lost deeply,
in the sheepish depths of the stratestist' oldest memories.

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
Graduation : January 29th 2004

McLean
Member

since 2004-01-05

Posts 484
state of marital bliss

1 posted 2004-01-25 01:36 PM

in salty foreclosure.
A rusted rain filled brimming cannister,

These are so vivid, dear...excellent job!

McLean

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2004-01-25 01:37 PM

(sigh) Oh Kellie, this is wonderful, sweet friend, it is great to see you again as your poetry keeps moving leaps and bounds, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kellie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2004-01-25 02:25 PM

Insight beyond your years...truly your art is in its season my friend.
TD

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

4 posted 2004-01-25 02:52 PM

Noah- Thank You. I appreciate your thoughfulness.

McLean- Thank You. I was trying to portray the strategist.

This Diamond- Your comments are so kind.
In this poem I was trying to portray the Strategist as a Farmer whose crops didn't do so well this harvest as a reflection on how his past wasn't up to par either. As he looked back on his life, and then forward.. all he saw was salty foreclosure.

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
Graduation : January 29th 2004

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

5 posted 2004-01-26 10:34 PM

nice effort, does not hurt to extend oneself. enjoyed.

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