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A Dream Come True
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A Dream Come True |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
“You’ve lost another dozen pounds” I heard the doctor say. “It’s almost like you’ve dropped a person somewhere along the way.” “One hundred twenty is the total. You have really seen this through.” “I cannot believe I’ve lost that much. It is my dream come true.” And so I walked out to the car my smile was two miles wide. The happiness and true elation I could not possibly hide. I thought back on the last seven months and how my life has changed; How the things about my life have been completely rearranged. No longer do I need a wheelchair to get myself around. I can reach below and pick up things that have fallen to the ground. Can you imagine not being able to even tie your shoes? It’s great to go out shopping and get clothes that are brand new. It is fun to see the looks on the faces of people that I know. They can’t believe it is I they see, the loss, it really shows. “You’ve lost so much! How do you feel?” they always seem to say. My beaming grin behind my blush gives my thoughts away. I am very thankful to be alive each morning when I wake. I am grateful for every breath with each easy step I take. I appreciate my family and friends who have helped me to be strong. I am thrilled for all those ugly pounds that are forever gone. So if you see me and I look as if I am moving through a dream. Don’t be surprised if I throw up my fist and let out a hearty scream. “I am beautiful! I am proud of myself! I won’t stop until I am thin! I am a winner! I love who I am! This battle I am going to win!” |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This is a great poem, written in the true Balladeer style. Wonderfully done, with no cheating on the phases to make the lines rhyme. Absolutely beautiful! |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
Thank you, LJA. Getting such complimentary words from the master writer himself is a thrill for me. [This message has been edited by Youngatheart (02-06-2004 03:44 AM).] |
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tavern wench Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 44 |
great poem |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This was really good.... We're gettin' sick and tired That's all ya hear, 'Bout biking, and hiking And tonin' up our rears What's happened to the days Of hips and curves? All this talkin bout that Adkins Is gettin' on my nerves There's just one way I want to work up a sweat And you haven't seen My aerobics yet.. We'll turn your bedroom Into a gym When we come out We'll be slim and trim... The wider the hip....the tighter the grip!!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Young -- you should be proud of yourself -- what an amazing accomplishment and what a very good piece of writing! .......jo |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very nice Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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tavern wench Junior Member
since 2004-01-11
Posts 44 |
Toerag, your way sounds like a lot more fun than counting carbs but your response would have been perfect without that last line.... Youngatheart, you have done a great job and your health is the most important thing here. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A real challenger... a real conquerer!!! God bless you! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, conratulations on fulfilling your goal, yay, we're so proud of you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Youngatheart, I am very touched by you. Congrats on this awesome achievement!  |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
LJA, Toerag, Iliana, Foxyoasis, Grover, Noah, Tavern wench, and Dixie... Thank you so much for your wonderful support. It feels so great to be alive again!!!!! Youngster |
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