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"Inclusions"
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"Inclusions" |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
They glimmer, sub-terranian, whose shimmer seldom shines, their facets bathed in subtle glow of some un-earthly kind. Though sparsely scattered they suffice to dissipate the dark, reflecting in their crystal depths, a fire from a spark. They fade the black to indigo, add luster to it's hue, impart their warmth to cooler shades, enliven what was blue. The spectrum feels their influence in unsuspecting ways, to mine what lies within, there from, to place it on display. A wealth beyond imagining, surpassing that of kings. Refining all that's possible to brighten everything. Quite gem-like in their rarities whose qualities we seek, to sparkle with a clarity to each that is unique. As each that is uncovered sheds it's modicum of light, one senses it's inclusion, shining forth, however slight. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I enjoyed this. It flowed so nicely. The words sounded like velvet. Thanks. Liz. "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
ESP, Thanks, personally, I was put off by the use of the word "each" in the last quatrain and couplet, it just didn't feel right. You know what they say, "Post" haste makes waste. Bad pun, going back to Bewilderment (hanging my head). Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey doc. I liked this alot. "inclusions" it's the fault that gives the ice that unexpected spark--  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dr. M -- this was a terrific poem. I've always been interested in gemstones (what woman isn't?!)! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Doc When I read your poetry I feel like I'm reading a master. Like now!  |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Martie stole my reply! Sucked me in right away, and still hasn't let me out. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool! |
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