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One Beat Beneath
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One Beat Beneath |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Buried in white winter wraps the grass in a casket of ice my heart beats faintly still stirring beneath the sting of your silence the grass is just playing dead nestled between the camoflauge that adheres to it the cold bites down hard, drowns itself in a mirror of streams nourishing the faithful ones below the grass will herald the glorius green of spring, taking the stage come the march moon it's all seasonal and speculation your heart still beats one beat beneath mine maybe when the trees and her leaves reunite, you will call my name again at my bare window [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (02-03-2004 09:52 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Buried in white the winter has wrapped the grass in a casket of ice You, too? a great description, Michele keep warm, M |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
I enjoyed this... very nice work. Grover. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Yay! I love the spring as it is my favorite season and I believe the most happiest time of year, sweet friend, yay, I wish this voice of love to come through your window soon like this, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michele, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the cold bites hard drowns itself in a mirror of streams Don't you just hate the way the chill creeps up and leaves you shivering? Loved this Michele, hope you are keeping warm enough. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Very descriptive and well done |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Michele: beautiful transition here: the grass in a casket of ice my heart beats faintly Loved the metaphor and the comparison here, and I, too wish for that same serenity *smile* miss your words |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
suzie Q i miss you mucho too more than mere words can say  |
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celestecat Junior Member
since 2004-02-02
Posts 29 |
enjoyed this one and the metaphor. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
your heart still beats one beat beneath mine Michele, I love that line especially. Hugs  Ethel |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
needed more airtime, so i gave it another look |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Brooklyn Boy was right!  EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"maybe when the trees and her leaves reunite, you will call my name again at my bare window" Loved those lines... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent!  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michelle, I know that I've already replied to this...but I just wanted to tell you again how much I enjoy Your writing. I wish I could do the metaphors the way you do. You are good, Lady. I love this part....... your heart still beats one beat beneath mine maybe when the trees and her leaves reunite, you will call my name again at my bare window Hugs, Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write...so very much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
simply awesome |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks kids for stopping in a while |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"maybe when the trees and her leaves reunite, you will call my name again at my bare window" Awesome |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Missed this one in February, glad it got bumped up....enjoyed ______ice ><> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for digging me up bboy, from way back in feb. u are too sweet thanks for reading people |
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