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Deluge Before the Requiem
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Deluge Before the Requiem |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I recieved news today that my 47 year old father is dying...too young to leave with so many regrets. And to him this poem is an unseen dedication. **For support to comfort myself, my brother, my mother, and especially my father....never knew i could cry for him until now** ~ ~ ~ Deluge Before the Requiem ------------------------- I found myself suspended, hanging from the moment with grip loosening, waiting for letting go and moving on... You were never there to catch me, and the waves cant carry me back to reclaim the vacancies from when i left you drowning in regrets. The distance kept growing between right and wrong and i should have called but i swallowed my youth and moved on. ...Was so easy once, saying goodbye... Anger has a way of making everything seem alright. Wish you could have seen me growing adapting, progressing towards enlightenment or maybe just to see me admit my regret for forgetten beginings and lost causes. You got a long way to walk cause the path to forgiveness goes all the way to the soul. ...and this is yours alone... I know you're going and no amount of promising is going stop this journey. And i cry for you a deluge; not because ive forgotten but because ive accepted we all make mistakes. ...was so easy once, saying goodbye.. [This message has been edited by muted (02-02-2004 11:18 AM).] |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
I loved the title. The poem was sad, hurt feelings expressed but also it expressed how you feel. My condolescences in regards to your father. I really liked your poem alot and I hope time will heal all your pain. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Dawn, After three readings here, I am still mostly speechless. There is so much emotion of all kinds threaded into this beautiful poem...SO bittersweet. Stirs up feelings of losing my father [a man who was hard to know and it left the question burning within: "How does one grieve the loss of a person who one never really had?] May your path through this loss be gentle and fruitful...*Hugs* ~P |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
A bittersweet thought, well penned..needs to go back to the top..... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is stunning... The final line says so much... Beautiful work! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What a big heart you have, Muted! I am sorry for the pain you are feeling and for your family. ...........hugs to you, jo |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Oh  this is powerful...I'm completely speechless from it, But I wish you comfort, and hope that things can be okay before you need to say goodbye. I think I'll try to call, and work on forgiving, my mom... even though she's the one who left...... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
amazing, obviously heart-felt write...the line: "the path to forgiveness goes all the way to the soul" is outstanding. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Dawn, I'm so sorry to hear of your father, sweet friend, I understand just how you feel as it too would sound sudden to me but know that despite the regrets and lack of closeness you may have had sometimes, deep down he always loved you, loves you, and always will love you and I know he will be forgiven by your gentle heart, God Bless You, I send angel comfort hugs to you and your family, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dawn, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Oh Dawn, I am so sorry about your father not being well. It is especially sad that he didn't get to see what a special person you are. I hope that you will be able to see him soon. I can't think of anything more, that would comfort him. My thoughts and prayers, are with you and yours. Richy |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You were never there to catch me, and the waves cant carry me back to reclaim the vacancies from when i left you drowning in regrets. well done, Dawn..and I am sorry you are going through this hugs Maureen |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
Very powerful....and bittersweet....I am truly sorry for you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aww Dawn, thank you for this heart speak. I am so sorry for the pain you are feeling. Warm hugs for you good poetess. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my... what a touch, what emotion...so bittersweet |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
many warm hugs to you Dawn |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
I want to say that all of you are very very sweet for reading this and offering your support...thank you for being such thoughtful poetfriends. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
appreciate the tone and intent of the poem, but have to say, the title Rocks!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write...just so powerful! Heart hugs to you sweet lady. and...never give up hope! ~ I like not only to be loved, |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Honest but sorrowful. Grover. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, I'm very sorry to hear about what you and and your family are going through. Your poem is wonderfully expressive, giving me a picture of the kind heart you have. Be well. Sadelite |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
muted, I'm so sorry. It's not easy, no matter what their age is. This is a beautiful poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
A very emotional piece... made me want to cry for your hurts but also made my spirit smile for the beautiful heart that lies behind these words... |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Dawn....what can i say...sorry to hear the very sad news...the poem was just a perfect reflection of how your heart is at this difficult time....my deepest prayers i send to you across the miles..... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
there is always hope muted , i know a few people one related whowas given an amount of time by the doctors ...a short time , that person is still here to this day in fair health .....healing starts within the heart.. i feel with your love he will make it Hugs, J
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