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The Liberty Bell
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The Liberty Bell |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States 
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The Liberty Bell By Paul Wilson It began around midnight with no warning at all The wind started to howl and the rain began to fall A storm of this magnitude I could not recall The black ocean was whipping up waves thirty feet tall The shroud of darkness hid us from our watery grave As our tiny boat was being tossed from wave to wave The young crew thou in-experienced was very brave As the captain I prayed all of their lives I could save For two days we fought the raging storm with all our might Alone on the wave tossed ocean with no help in sight Tired and weary unable to continue the fight One of the crewmembers was swept overboard last night Today we got a break the storm began to subside We were ready to get off this roller coaster ride We tried sending a message but the radio was fried I had to keep it from the crew so to them I lied I told them it wouldn’t be long, help was on the way All we had to do was just hang on one more day This hurricane we had beaten, a monster called Fay The morning sun welcomed us as we watched dolphins play Captain Bill… come quick come quick the mate began to yell We have a problem his voice sounded scared I could tell Something knocked a hole in our boat the Liberty Bell I said fear not…we’ll be saved from this watery hell About that time on the horizon I saw a light Help was on the way at last we would be saved this night I rang the bell and called for the crew with all my might Now saved we watched the Liberty Bell sink out of sight "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (04-15-2004 02:52 PM).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the flow here is great, and the story a really good one  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! This is quite the story Paul!! Fantastic write...so much enjoyed reading this piece! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sometimes, a lie becomes a wish, granted... Well done, Paul. I love historical pieces... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Paul, Well done my friend, enjoyed. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow! This had me at the edge of my seat the whole read through! Loved this story, reminds me of my days in the USCG in the Gulf on the love of my life: Point Sal 82352. I hope you have more like this on Captain. JL |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
SEA...Glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for the reply...Paul Nancy...Thanks for taking time to read and reply.Looks like my muse is starting to stay busy...Paul Karilea...I guess so. A little faith & hope works wonders. Thanks for reading and the reply...Paul Seymour...I really appreciate you taking time to read & reply. Glad you enjoyed...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
JL...So glad you enjoyed this little story. I really appreciate your reply. This just came to me to from out of the blue today while thinking about all the hurricanes that have came into the Gulf. In my poem it was the USCG that came to the rescue even thou I failed to mention it. Where were you stationed on the Point Sal? "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Paul, Your muse has been very enthusiastic to spark this beauty! It flowed so perfectly that I wondered if it were non-fiction-it was to real to be contrived. Great job! Sade |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sadelite...Thank you very much for that sweet reply. It's about time my muse got the lead out, he's been on vacation for about two months. Thanks again for taking time to read...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome story! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Paul, you have a great storytelling way about your poetry! Enjoyed this very much! And, glad you were "RESCUED." |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Dixie... I'm glad you think so. Thanks to people like you and your thoughtful reply I always try my best. Glad you enjoyed...Paul iliana...I really appreciate your reply. When I first started reading and writing poetry I would read others poems that told a story and I told myself that's how I want to learn to write and I really try hard to make my poems into a story, so your reply really means alot to me. Thanks...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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vega Junior Member
since 2004-04-12
Posts 24wherever I lay my hat. |
I liked this very much,Kept me interested right through. Imagery is great and the storyline eerie. Well written.. Take care... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Paul...this was an amazing story...love the ocean, it's richness in depth, it's serene and embracing calm which hypnotizes, even her moods of fear, anger, tears and great reminder of human nature and all purpose... I would love to sail the ocean the rest of my days, if God granted me a wish...brings out the best in me...as your write just did. Marvelous...thank you for sharing. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
vega...So glad you liked this. Thanks for the reply...Paul LeeJ...I'm glad you enjoyed this.You are so right the ocean and nature has many faces. I just spoke to someone out in the Gulf of Mexico & they said it is as calm as a glass of water. Thanks very much for taking time to read & reply...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Enjoyed this story very much Paul. Very well written indeed. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Chris...Thanks very much for the read and your sweet reply...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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