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Baby Boy |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I saw you in the restaurant. It must have been a treat to be able to go out. You were so excited. Jabbering endlessly to your father and brother. You didn’t let their lack of interest bother you. Guess it was the norm. I watched you with keen interest. Your enthusiasm like a spring bloom, so happy to greet the world. You stood by your father as he paid. Your words suddenly slurred, with a roll of eyes, I saw you fall. I watched you seize. Disbelief shadowed my face, for the first thing you saw, when function was restored was your father, screaming at you for getting too excited, and causing an embarrassment. As your father’s words excited you once again, from somewhere I heard your brother shriek, “Get him out of here!” I turned away, shedding a tear for their lack, the scars you would wear, and the enthusiasm that would soon disappear. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
awesome one susan |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
painful painful read... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Few things anger me more that ill-treatment or inconsideration of a child. This one makes me angy...as well as sad.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dittoing Dear... but you portrayed reality very well... perhaps that's why it hurts so much... see you in #32, Susan... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You know...this wasn't my story, I just made it mine. It happened in a restaurant in Indiana and it was my sister that witnessed it. When she told me, I was, well pissed. So I wrote it out. Thank you for the kind replies. (32 it is Karilea!) "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh this hurts!! oh how angry i would have been if i were to watch this scene in person! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, this nearly has me crying as it brought back many memories of all the precious moments I saw ripped apart by similiar type behavior by my ex-husband -- and the scars that left, we still deal with 21 years later. There are all kinds and forms of abuse -- I understand this kind.  to you.......jo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
happens all too often, on behalf of the unenthused, thanks |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
No, thank you, Raph. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
beautiful piece susan! |
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