»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #31
»
It is in the Silence the Poet Dies
| Open Poetry #31 |
|
It is in the Silence the Poet Dies |
|
muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
|
It is in the Silence the Poet Dies (A Villanelle) Her heart leaves a lyrical stain Flowing with ink of the night Bleeding a song wrought of pain Love's vigil can not forever sustain A soul thats shy from the light Her heart leaves a lyrical stain Needing to scream, but will refrain A voice wounded by whispered plight Bleeding a song wrought of pain And in dreams on wings of the crane She will find mercy in freedom of flight Her heart leaves a lyrical stain In secret wars the one who's left slain Is she alone, lost to the fight Bleeding a song wrought of pain Without audience the poetry will wane Slowly her vision shall fade from sight Her heart leaves a lyrical stain Bleeding a song wrought of pain. |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*amazed by you* |
||
|
Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
There is real depth of feeling within this poem Dawn....the reader feels every carefully chosen word.. Thank you.... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
||
|
Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
And in dreams on wings of the crane She will find mercy in freedom of flight Her heart leaves a lyrical stain So beautiful and so very touching! Love, Margherita |
||
|
aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
And in dreams on wings of the crane She will find mercy in freedom of flight Her heart leaves a lyrical stain taking it to another level with this one ,strong feel to this write, but your heart would never stain me  lol villanelle ? hugs , J |
||
|
ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Deep and beautiful. TD |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
muted Very lovely work! |
||
|
Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I believe I could put a tune to this. Thanks for sharing and enjoyed! |
||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
For what it may be worth, I was impressed!  Love & Light, EA |
||
|
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
And in dreams on wings of the crane She will find mercy in freedom of flight Her heart leaves a lyrical stain cast your dreams onto the birds that fly over horizons we can only surmise where they must take them very lovely the way this wove together |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
incredibly beautiful flow, the melody of this lyrical write is pure delight thank you, Dawn |
||
|
steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
you have taken a difficult style (at least, in my opinion) and made it come alive with ease |
||
vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
||
Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
in hopes your voice never dies....  beautifully done!~~**~~ |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
muted, this is wonderful. I always admire poets who tackle difficult poetry forms and do them well. This villanelle is perfect in every way  |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Really good. These are so hard for me. You make it look so easy! |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've heard from the best. Congratulations! An excellent job! |
||
|
muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you ALL have really made my day, thank you for all the support im smiling from ear to ear |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow Dawn this is really very beautiful, I wish I could write a Villanelle, especially as magnificent as you do.  Maree Keeping this one The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
