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jellybeans
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0 posted 2004-04-14 11:51 AM


Both pride and pleasure welled up inside
when I watched you work
for you did not just drive
a big yellow machine
you became one.

Even from a distance the simultaneous
concentration and yet easiness was evident
with yellow buckets for hands your arms
reached out and calculated their way
into the earthen landscape.

As your near perfect gaze set the level and grade
huge black wheels spun forward and back
a nudge or a powerful lunge
they dared no resistance to your insistence.

And at the end of a long day when you became
my son again you were never too tired
for a smile, a hug, and a hi mom...oh
what I would give for just one more
hi mom.

Inside this void that death has ripped
my heart is sliced wide open with nothing
but memories of you to backfill the gaping and
it hardly seems fair that big yellow machines
keep moving...


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aujussy wolf
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1 posted 2004-04-14 12:17 PM


major emotion releasing ...cool write

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2 posted 2004-04-14 12:26 PM


oh JB...
jellybeans
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3 posted 2004-04-14 03:19 PM


this is another of my 'documenting' of memories....that and trying to deal with the highway construction that I have to pass on my daily commute, there is only so much that tunnel vision can deal with.......sigh

thank you

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4 posted 2004-04-14 03:39 PM



Your son is very, very
proud of you, his Mom...
and I know he is sending a
"Hi, Mom...love you..."

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5 posted 2004-04-14 04:11 PM


ah lady, you brought tears to my eyes, your comment, I could actually visualize, thank you...so much
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6 posted 2004-04-14 04:17 PM


I'll ask my Dad to visit with him...
together, they will provide us
with many good memories from which
to draw upon.

I do know, my friend.


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7 posted 2004-04-14 06:01 PM


I feel your pain dear Jellybean.
Great big hug coming your way from Ohio.
Bon-Bon

JL
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8 posted 2004-04-14 06:28 PM


I feel your pain!  Living in Houston is a constant reminder of “the big yellow machines.”  I think construction started right after the wheel was invented, and will continue into the next century and beyond.
JL


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9 posted 2004-04-14 06:39 PM


Simply incredible writing....the ending could not have been written any other  way. I can see inside your heart here, K.
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10 posted 2004-04-14 08:13 PM


Jelly Bean,
  My heart goes out to you and your family.  Loss is something I've never gotten used it, and it tears me up to see others go through it.  It was over thirty years before I started to write of those special people in my life and memories.  I'm glad you're doing it much sooner.  Writing is helping me some to unfold the feelings I've had tucked away.  My thoughts are with you.  
    Your poem touched me very much.
                 Cathy

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11 posted 2004-04-15 02:40 AM


I used to call my uncle and tell him jokes all the time. He died... one night I read this great joke and lifted up the phone to call him. As soon as I did that I realised, again, that he was gone. For weeks I was angry at anyone who had anything 'funny' to say. In my eyes all humor had gone, and it only seemed practical that the rest of the world should think the same.
Death just isn't fair...

This read just aches so much.
But keep writing, its good to get it out.
Know that he is with you still,
and he loves you more than ever.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

jellybeans
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12 posted 2004-04-15 02:17 PM


thank you all, so much! sharing pain somehow makes it more bearable, and I thank God for all of you here
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13 posted 2004-04-16 03:34 PM


There isn't any fairness... but there is love that will last even longer than the horrific pain... and memories to pass along to a little girl.
How beautifully you write heartbreak... how well you show how special your relationship. He IS proud of you... I've no doubt!

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