Open Poetry #31 |
Gabriel (for Dawn-Muted)Challenge |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Gabriel In your shadows waiting- Raven eyes- - ghostly desires silence lost to pain and longing Whispers of chill- the night air cold speak to him looking down upon his mind Humbled by fear-- a calling in tremendous echo love knows, no fear you slipped your tongue-- closed his eyes, softly touched his tears bury the sage, its time to go inside who was too argue? weary and tired Alone in mystery’s, darkness a feeling of comfort -- Footprints-- your journals long, spill your tears for all who dare to read { through the darkness} in distant fires you will hear small voices, He is crying tonight, his castle burning ‘does it move you’? -‘yes’- ‘do you love them’? -‘yes’- you are needed give of faith holy in thou name trembled before his, wings mighty your heart longing You are needed he is crying in fear he is lost and alone ‘does that move you’? -‘yes’- ‘do you love them’? -‘yes’- fall to your knees weep your soul forgiving believe in faith rest your palms of wisdom upon his eyes you will heal you are needed here go live ~~**~~ The sound of silence calls, I hear your voice and suddenly I'm falling, lost in a dream The echo of our souls meet ~~**~~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"he is crying in fear he is lost and alone ‘does that move you’? -‘yes’- ‘do you love them’? -‘yes’- fall to your knees weep your soul forgiving believe in faith rest your palms of wisdom upon his eyes you will heal you are needed here go live" Lauren, I read the challenge last night, and this is in my opinion, perfect. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic Lauren! Challenge well met... Love ya pretty lady~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
....ive cried through this whole poem...sobbing...youve touched a deep deep place... Im so thankful to those who took this challenge....To sing to a stranger's heart like sister, friends, familiars.. thank you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! go live what a last line! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Absolutely marvelous write! Way to go! JL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in distant fires you will hear small voices, =============================== those lines tugged at me mothy heartstrings. beautiful offering to the challenge Lauren-girlie. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
*Bump* too beautiful to leave behind |
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