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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2004-04-14 10:37 AM

Gabriel

          In your shadows waiting-

Raven eyes- - ghostly desires
silence lost to
pain and longing

Whispers of chill-
     the night air    cold
speak to him
looking down upon his mind

Humbled   by fear--
a calling    in tremendous
echo    love knows,   no   fear
     you slipped  your tongue--
closed his eyes, softly touched his tears

bury the sage,   its time to go
  inside

        who was too argue?
weary and   tired

Alone    in mystery’s,  darkness
a feeling of comfort  --

Footprints-- your journals long,
       spill  your  tears
for all who dare to read

     { through the darkness}

      in   distant fires
you will hear small voices,

He is crying tonight, his castle
burning    ‘does it move you’?    -‘yes’-
‘do you    love them’?    -‘yes’-

you are needed
give of faith
holy in thou name

trembled before his,
           wings    mighty
your heart longing

You  are needed

he is crying in fear
     he is lost and alone
‘does that move you’?  -‘yes’-
‘do you   love them’?    -‘yes’-

fall to your  knees

      weep

your soul forgiving
believe in faith

rest your palms
of wisdom upon his eyes
you will heal

you are needed       here

go    live

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2004-04-14 11:36 AM

"he is crying in fear
     he is lost and alone
‘does that move you’?  -‘yes’-
‘do you   love them’?    -‘yes’-

fall to your  knees

      weep

your soul forgiving
believe in faith

rest your palms
of wisdom upon his eyes
you will heal

you are needed       here

go    live"

Lauren, I read the challenge last night, and this is in my opinion, perfect.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-04-14 11:47 AM

Fantastic Lauren!
Challenge well met...
Love ya pretty lady~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

3 posted 2004-04-14 11:53 AM

....ive cried through this whole poem...sobbing...youve touched a deep deep place...

Im so thankful to those who took this challenge....To sing to a stranger's heart like sister, friends, familiars..

thank you

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-04-14 12:37 PM

awesome!

go live

what a last line!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2004-04-14 02:29 PM

Absolutely marvelous write! Way to go!
JL

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2004-04-14 04:58 PM

in distant fires
you will hear small voices,
===============================

those lines tugged at me mothy heartstrings.
beautiful offering to the challenge Lauren-girlie.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-04-15 02:47 AM

*Bump*
too beautiful to leave behind

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