»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #31
»
Find the Wind
| Open Poetry #31 |
|
Find the Wind |
|
Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
|
Lost thoughts of you invaded my heart while I tried to rest from chambers of soul that hold him--memories of mind against the backdrop of water that’s hard to think about This morning sunlight swept through my window warming everything but my heart it offered no replacement no understanding--no surrender no mending his voice or maybe another’s tangles the distance of some night where the eyes are never satisfied but maybe I love him? I try to find the breeze to feel his touch it was dark again when I remembered -- talking to myself& here I am letting midnight take over - seeping endless hours wrapped in wasted music another nights storm without comfort or change of season I trace the blue trickle of tears with lonely fingers weaving the black from eye to mouth perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow you are not here to whisper me to sleep storms plays echo across the sky I find the wind and weep ~~**~~ The sound of silence calls, I hear your voice and suddenly I'm falling, lost in a dream The echo of our souls meet ~~**~~ |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved | |||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lauren....wow....I tired to find a favorite part here, but damn girl, all of this touches me  excellent excellent write  |
||
|
JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Layers of silk...James |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"storms plays echo across the sky I find the wind and weep " Layers upon layers peeled away... gawd this is SO good. Love ya pretty lady~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
||
|
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Just about as pretty as pretty can be~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
||
|
Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Beautiful in its sorrow. Susan |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow ~~~~~~~ that line takes my words away.... (ykikykik)  Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
||
|
Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I trace the blue trickle of tears with lonely fingers weaving the black from eye to mouth perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow Beautiful write Lauren. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd how I love your sad ones! |
||
|
muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"I trace the blue trickle of tears with lonely fingers weaving the black from eye to mouth perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow you are not here to whisper me to sleep storms plays echo across the sky I find the wind and weep " ````````````````````````````  you write of sadness so beautifully,almost makes melancholy seem inviting... so touching and gentle |
||
|
choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
WOW! You move in so many directions simultaneously, yet seem so focused...beautiful write...~P |
||
|
Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Sad... yet beautiful... emotional, maybe...? Enjoyed. -Rdz One in a sea of millions has the power to change the world... |
||
|
Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
Nice! |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"you are not here to whisper me to sleep storms plays echo across the sky I find the wind and weep" Oh, Lauren, there were so many good lines in this one, but these are my favorite. ...jo |
||
|
Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"here I am letting midnight take over - seeping endless hours wrapped in wasted music another nights storm without comfort or change of season I trace the blue trickle of tears with lonely fingers weaving the black from eye to mouth perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow you are not here to whisper me to sleep storms plays echo across the sky I find the wind and weep" ~ Lauren, you express your inner-most sadness of your loss very well here, especially, to me, in the stanzas I have pasted above. |
||
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I trace the blue trickle of tears with lonely fingers weaving the black from eye to mouth perhaps we all get to that edge where the moon remembers sorrow" I find it very difficult to respond to what you write..the depth leaves me without words.. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
||
|
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Susan~ that a beautiful compliment thank you so much...hugssss ~~**~~ |
||
|
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thank you are for reading this humble offering....I appreciate your time more then you know.... ~~~~ Mike...I emailed you...  ~~**~~ |
||
|
sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
ihe most sweetest poem from the sweetest most wonderful big sister..i loved this peom kep it upp.. love:: |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
