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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-04-12 05:12 PM



... In Particular

I look around and feel the emptiness
that spills into my life, that
even you cannot change.
Too long this way, questioning
the whys and how it came to be.

You ease a few of the rough spots
but the past shadows me
and the absence of you, any you,
mounts the darkness
leaving me dreams to climb,
blindfolding my way.

I can't feel free
when peace is not at hand,
when worry becomes commonplace
and belief is like pearls strung together
on a weakened thread, ready to be lost
when least expected.

"Depressed", I say, the cycle of "nots"
swirling around me, placing boundaries
where once you could cross.
Emotionally overdrawn, waiting
for the next deposit to season my change
and bring the mood back to "me".

M


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2004-04-12 06:21 PM


Maureen

This is very melancholy but oh so well constructed with the emotions evoked by loneliness.
"belief is like pearls strung together
on a weakened thread, ready to be lost
when least expected"

Classic poetry I'd say!

Eric

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
2 posted 2004-04-12 07:32 PM


me thinks the soul wrote this me friend...it's definitely from it's depths...
mucho ejoyed reading this...

jimmy

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-04-13 03:25 AM


there is always a good season
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with you
4 posted 2004-04-13 11:56 AM


"You ease a few of the rough spots
but the past shadows me
and the absence of you, any you,
mounts the darkness
leaving me dreams to climb,
blindfolding my way."


I relate to this

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2004-04-13 12:01 PM


This melancholy write matches the weather here today M.
Excellent write.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
6 posted 2004-04-13 01:19 PM


These feelings so well expressed, I have known and recognize.  hugs to you and wishes for sunny weather!  jo
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