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0 posted 2004-04-11 12:13 PM



Arriving home into this empty place
I anxiously a-wait,
Your presence.
I can’t wait to tell you about all the fun
And the good of the day.
Yelling down the steps, my voice runs.
Finally there’s hope.
I spit a sentence or two out…
You cope.
Through my words you muddle
What’s important to you is about to be shared,
Cuz’ about me you really don’t care.
A million questions about him,
None about me
I sigh,
And its funny- you really don’t understand why
I’m blind to you.
But he’s a gem.
Not even perfect and round…
I sit here as my head pounds,
What the hell is wrong with you.


--i usually dont like what i write, but i like this... nor do i usually share. I dont really know if you guys understand where im coming from w/ this poem.

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iliana
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1 posted 2004-04-11 12:51 PM


Censored -- welcome to PIP.  You expressed yourself well and I understand what you meant.  People listen here.  
passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-04-11 05:28 AM


Welcome to Passions!

Good to have you here!

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3 posted 2004-04-11 06:42 AM



I've enjoyed your sharing of emotion and look forward to more.
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4 posted 2004-04-11 09:24 AM





Welcome to Passions !!
Chris

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-04-11 09:29 AM


Nicely Done... Welcome to Passions!!

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-04-11 09:30 AM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Enjoyed your first post.
I look forward to seeing more of our work.
Have a Happy Easter!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2004-04-11 09:32 AM


Censored
Welcome and enjoyed the write.

ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2004-04-11 10:30 AM


Welcome to Passions.
Your first post was well written to exemplify the frustrations and subtle angles in relationships and life.  Relax and enjoy the surroundings.
ThisDiamond

vandana
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9 posted 2004-04-11 08:15 PM


welcome to passions enjoyed
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