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A Conversation Imagined
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A Conversation Imagined |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Conversation Imagined He says he doesn’t see, not quite past that first strand of cobwebs that hide the corners, but he listens, his blue eyes full and I say again what I can only measure with a poet’s eye. I tell him that my heart yearns for more days, that I feel time next to me pushing me against myself and my skin feels so thin. He touches my arms, runs his finger down the blue vein and lingers in the curve inside my elbow, telling me he understands how this skin has changed and dew no longer clings but must be slathered on daily drenched but still it thirsts for intensive care, yes he sees that. But that is not it I say, that is only a layer that is tangible, I am hidden in here with all these years filled up and bloated with things that need to be mentioned because they sing to me and fill me to bursting. He cocks his head and turns away from my face that has become too open and I know it is easier for him to enrapture a flower and pull it into a statement that says how fragile time is but glorious now—don’t you see how glorious before the turning down of petal the falling crisp departure of leaf this is where I put my heart each day for I make happiness then watch it wither on some table, he says this with his hunched shoulders. And I understand how we each capture this golden vibrant life with a different grasp and as much as I want him to pierce my soul and see me naked and unadorned I also want to stay here pure and only me for I have not even ventured all the way and can only take tall truth in increments that fit my skin and even then I look at the bubble that bursts and think can this be mine? --------- a repost to remember what is still true I am just a traveler looking for a home, finding I carry it around with me, and sometimes it's just too heavy. [This message has been edited by Martie (01-31-2004 10:41 AM).] |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
you say so much here my head and heart are spinning - what a conversation you give us to ponder and to listen in on and to wonder where we are having this smae conversation - ah what wonders you do with poems Martie - Paul |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
The hopes and dreams we have, like so many rose petals pressed between the pages Can only flourish, when both the sun is vibrant, and the rain plenty Of course, a little manure can go a long way... Sorry ‘bout that last part Martie I thought maybe a little giggle, along with a smile, might help... I loved this, along with all the rest  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) This is so lightly heartbreaking, sweet friend, ever too often I try to understand what the spirits of my lost friends want to discuss to me and I can only imagine it as it is vague as the vapor over the mountains on an April day! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send angel comfort hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This...is quality. Such a beautiful look inside, at the way you love and live and look at the progression of life, all in one still-life scene. You work magic, Martie. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Much depth in this. Made me wonder how many conversations occur between two people when only one is actually involved and the other is just a voice in that person's head. *smile* |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hiya Martie, what a beautiful picture and a very loving song....thank you for sharing. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:My favorite bit in a poem full to the brim with hard/vague images that lend a consistent, smooth, real feeling to me as a reader. It flows with emotion and several visuals that make it... real. Very nice Martie. Glad I caught this. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I am hidden in here with all these years filled up and bloated with things that need to be mentioned because they sing to me and fill me to bursting." Gawd Martie...how well I know this feeling. Beautiful, insightful write as always. You continue to blow me away with your words. Heart Hugs~ ~ Is that love I see in your eyes... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I do think I understand this feeling.... and with it, you deserve a hug... SO.....here, have one, on me!! They are free, by the way.... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
the images are very vivid... Reflelction time, ~Sadelite |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
He touches my arms, runs his finger down the blue vein and lingers in the curve inside my elbow, telling me he understands how this skin has changed and dew no longer clings but must be slathered on daily drenched but still it thirsts for intensive care, yes he sees that. I logged on today with the intention of posting a poem about aging... but after getting lost in your words, I know mine need to go home and grow up a bit to even deserve a place in your shadow. *S* Magnificent work! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautifuly worded and deeply felt...great write! Eric |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie This poem is like the circle of water that expands to infinity.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
He cocks his head and turns away from my face that has become too open and I know it is easier for him to enrapture a flower and pull it into a statement that says how fragile time is Just smiling at you in your wisdom, and thanking you for your wonderful way. Hugs to you Martie~ |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very nice! Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie -- I did not see it the first time, so I feel lucky you did repost it -- it's so real, and so well done! hugs to you.....jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martie A most excellent read... I was going to put in quotes the most outstanding stanzas and phrases, but such as they are, all are far to good to seperate from the next...I would have to copy the whole poem to do it justice....no extra fillers in this poem, that's for sure.. * This is a love poem, as I understand it.. Something tells me it is not imagined at all, that the "he" in this is real, or am I wrong and perhaps you wish he was? A man that is truly in love with a woman does not see her flaws, especially those that time has scribbled on her skin. * Anyway, this poem to me is like a good piece of music when the violinest asks a question and the chello answers, or perhaps like the other day when I heard two pileateds calling...the female asked and the male aswered..sorry, I am nutcase, I hear poetry in all kinds of sounds... Truly enjoyed this, gonna leave now before this becomes a longer novel... _______ice ><> |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Thank you for sharing this. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
But that is not it I say, that is only a layer that is tangible, I am hidden in here with all these years filled up and bloated with things that need to be mentioned because they sing to me and fill me to bursting. ~*~ I keep learning. You've still got a lot of teaching to do. Even when we read what was laid down before, new passages open... like a flower. |
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Kie Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 77USA |
While reading this I felt as though I was sharing someones moment. It brought tears to my eyes and filled me with emotion. Incredible poem. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, this is so beautiful... beyond words, sweet lady.  Hugs  Ethel |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sorry I'm late to this one, Martie... Feeling every word...and understanding... Love you, my friend... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well if vl is late, then I am doubly so, but this is beautiful...it is so picturesque that it unfolds like a movie...sigh...a movie made from the heart... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wow, Martie! This is absolutely wonderful and I sure can relate to it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"and my skin feels so thin" and that is what it gets down to.... Martie?  |
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