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Midnight Blue Awakenings ... duet with Lauren
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Midnight Blue Awakenings ... duet with Lauren |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Midnight Blue Awakenings ~prelude~ And I can hear you whisper my name in endless ache lingering traces of love tease my lips that I am here to remember your soul So afraid no one would understand such pain, your diary heart bled down the page your need became my reasons to breathe naked in your confessions, marked by the scars that the cruel years and too many tears had carved More than I wanted to love you ... I wanted to grant you reprieve, still in time your truths revealed wounds that would never heal, in one heartbreaking, final appeal you prayed for merciful flight The kindest thing I could do for you ... was give you back to the night ~legend~ {In anticipation of your arrival ... the moon dressed in feathered gown the stars adorned amethyst crowns ...} I still see you kneeling on the shore premonitions in the mist tears stained the tides your pleas became psalms, I could only stand in silent awe as forgiveness painted wings upon your palms rain fell as holy water the sky exhaled bending light I saw you ascend in fragments of distant glitter traveling beyond the stars without ever leaving my sight. The moon and stars rotate on endless patterns where once I stood as one with you, now left here alone the pleading heart walking among the waves do you feel my gentle hands in desperate hours it is then I breathe you in all scents from earth these moments that rise from sea take me to places that are far away let me hide my weeping within your wings I knelt before the windowsill held my hands in prayer begging the moon that you might kiss my lips again my soft pleas-- softly still I listen for one sound, for the prelude to grow euphony beyond any poetry I struggle with this restless night a single breath holding all pieces together sinking into the scent of my naked solitude I listen across stillness across any light I may have left inside will you hear my vespers from a darkened soul in shape-less shadows life will gather with waves here among fertile enchantments my heart unfolds petal by petal waiting for warm caress let night awaken ~epilogue~ There is a sacred silence in each falling shadow's sound the lament of sorrow's solemn hush the echoes of stone beneath water's crush After a long season of intimate mourning inspiration returned, restoring my faith in winter's white solace consoled by your voice in muse whisperings, silhouetted memories translated to verse prayers to poetry, scripture to rhyme, seducing the page, haunting exquisite every line For all that you mercifully left behind in your dusking persuasion, with each breath of a moment's passing you became the star's illumination you, my love ... became the sky's inspiration beneath the moon's revelations etched upon midnight's blue I am granted deliverance in the promise of you Love is divine like that exploding between sea and horizon I dreamt of you last night rising from the mist: for a moment your being reflected every water drop every tear I deeply inhaled your solar rhythms between ocean and sky sun and star, earth and seas there is no distance in first blossom of spring in gentle fall of snow tapping rain upon my roof there is no distance between you and I softly night awakens in her amber phase *Thank you lovely Lauren for the invitation to dance and the inspiration that sparked my muse. Most of all for the butterfly connection we found in one anothers words.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yeah... what I figured..  wonderful... very nicely done..both of you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM and Lauren You played with fingers of delight On my senses with this write. Excellent. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Capt~ thank you, JM is divine inspiration... ~~ SY thank you for the touching reply.... ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES! Brava!! As soon as I saw the names, JM and Lauren.. I just knew it was to be a keeper! There are far too many favourite passages in this incredible write for me to pick and choose a few here...now. Amazing blending of voices...delicate, exquisite. Thank you...thank you...thank you both, so much! ~Smiles, Hugs & Love to you both, Nancy~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes!, Ditto on the BRAVA! very lovely phrasing, and smooth flowing thoughts. Loved this Liz |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well now, you two phenomenal poetesses, please stand up and take a bow ~ or do a curtsey!  I wasn't letting a duet by two of my favourite poets, get by me! No sirree! And I'm certainly thankful that I didn't! I am filled with many emotions and visions ~ and awe! I am so moved by the beauty and grace of your collaborative and creative spirit voices...   May your days be as glorious as your writing! Love & Light, Linda |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Nancy~ Liz & Linda~ thank you for the heartfelt replies....and for taking time to read I am more then pretty proud of this........ ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie and Lauren This is exquisite!! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Brava!! An amazingly beautiful duet. Enjoyed this thoroughly. hugs to you both! Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sweet.....most definitely worth the wait. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Martie~Chris and Ed thank you for taking time to read and reply, it was worth the wait for me as well....JM does wonder with words....we appreciate your time... ~~**~~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanking you both, for my latest library acquisition. This wonderfully woven piece is WAY beyond beautiful. It falls into another more celestial realm...left me nearly speechless. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
If I said "It's about time" would that sound like a complaint?  This is so soft and flowing, and a beautiful peek into a mirrored "heart diary". You made me understand the intensity of a whisper. It reminded me of one of those quiet screams--trying to voice pain that doesn't know language.  Total admiration here at the grace and the quiet quality of the passion. Brava, ladies. Brava. (tossing roses) |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Kacy and Karen~ thank you for the heartfelt words and compliment! throwing roses back at ya both.... hugsssss ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Janet Marie & Lauren... This is beautiful..a delight to read. Well done both of you Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see you, and you... and hear the blue true of it all... I applaud...and smile... and stand in mute amaze... I am so very proud of both of you. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
OK, I've cleared my calender for the next week, since that's how long it will likely take me to read this...but I will be back.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful co-creation girls! I put it in my library to enjoy again ... Love, Margherita |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
now this is something to save... beautiful writing, the two of you *s M |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
quite the combined talent of inspirations this night finds me moved, thanks to the both of you. *S |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 i held my breath through every word, because the beauty was overwhelming. i weep because words defy how deeply this touched me duet again soon you two |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky...James |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Maree~ thank you and I can say a delight to write... ~ Karilea~ you compliment is so very touching.... the blue true of it all'' I adore that... ~ Duncan~ LOL so what are you saying? it's long? thank you.... ~ Margherita~ awwww sweet lady, thank you ever so much! ~ vandana~ thank you for replying and reading.... ~ Maureen~ hugss lady thanks for stopping by....so glad you enjoyed this... ~ Craig~ so glad you found this moving....big ole' bears hugssss you....good to see that smile ~ Dawn ~ your reply is ever so touching....thank you dear lady~ James~ Silky fits well, thank you sir! ~~ Janet Marie~ thank you for this as well....I too, was moved and touched by your stunning ability to bring words to life....youknowiknow....luv ya  ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My mothy thanks to each and everyone of you for your lovely & kind replies. Its been awhile since I've posted, almost forgot how. I was a wreck this morning getting this post up. Guess I've gotten shy in my old age.  Lauren, I dont know what took us so long, but it was indeed worth the wait. And it comes as no surprise that it would be you and your poetry that brought my muse back from its long drought. So many times your poems wrote what my heart needed to say, but lacked the expression. I'm so glad we got the chance to poetically two step. Thank you again lovely poetess. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Absolutely inspired from beginning to end. You two sweethearts should be writing together more. I've always loved your work Janet and since Lauren has come along I've really attached myself to her work. This is.. "I still see you kneeling on the shore premonitions in the mist tears stained the tides your pleas became psalms, I could only stand in silent awe as forgiveness painted wings upon your palms rain fell as holy water the sky exhaled bending light I saw you ascend in fragments of distant glitter traveling beyond the stars" such a marvelous level of inspired work I just am so thrilled to read it. The rest being excellent too! Eric |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ladies ... this is exquisite! This flows so beautifully, I can't see the changeover between either of you. It is seemless, and brilliantly done. The descriptive elements are breathtaking to say the least. Over and over, I was really taken with the vivid use of imagery or the unique twist on a word or phrase. What a pretty and soothing read ... you both got a big sighhhhhhhhh at the end of that one. I just loved it. Well done indeed Lauren and JM! Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Eric~ and thank you for such sweet words....~~ Kit~ Dear Lady I apprecite your tender reply, as I am sure Janet Marie does too....thank you for taking time to read.... ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It's good you marked the text, because without that it's hard to say where one ends and the other begins -- as a good duet should be! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
James F~ hello and thank you for stopping in....we appreciate the visit.... ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Wow! This was so good. I don't know where to begin what I was while reading this beautifully written piece of poetry... So many thoughts came to mind ~ "Let the light surround you, once lost but I was found..." Dream Theater, Opeth, Savatage... I could take some of these lines and write music for them. Heartfelt sorrow, love and romance, letting go... nature... inspiration... I could go on. Janet Marie and Lauren, I bow to you both. "You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark." |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Opeth~ &  such a kind reply....thank you sir...for being who you are.... ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you all so much for letting us know you enjoyed this, your gracious responses are appreciated. Lauren...thank you for being such a lovely butterfly hostess |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JM~ ~~**~~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
“And I can hear you whisper my name in endless ache lingering traces of love tease my lips that I am here to remember your soul” The thought of someone remembering your soul, feeling a purpose in doing so...pretty much says it all for me. In fact, I would’ve ended the poem right there. Just jerkin’ your moth chains... “More than I wanted to love you ... I wanted to grant you reprieve, still in time your truths revealed wounds that would never heal, in one heartbreaking, final appeal you prayed for merciful flight The kindest thing I could do for you ... was give you back to the night” Don’t know which one of you wrote the verse, but the use of italics on “heartbreaking” accented it perfectly. The sentiment once again speaking to a degree of devotion rarely experienced. “{In anticipation of your arrival ... the moon dressed in feathered gown the stars adorned amethyst crowns ...} I still see you kneeling on the shore premonitions in the mist tears stained the tides your pleas became psalms, I could only stand in silent awe as forgiveness painted wings upon your palms rain fell as holy water the sky exhaled bending light I saw you ascend in fragments of distant glitter traveling beyond the stars without ever leaving my sight.” Some great lines in this verse, and visually it is incredibly effective. “in desperate hours it is then I breathe you in all scents from earth these moments that rise from sea take me to places that are far away” Just liked how these few lines encompassed such a “large” thought. “I listen across stillness across any light I may have left inside will you hear my vespers from a darkened soul in shape-less shadows life will gather with waves here among fertile enchantments my heart unfolds petal by petal waiting for warm caress let night awaken” Resolve and hope....seeming to be so distinct, even polar, are somehow blended effortlessly in this. Impressive. “After a long season of intimate mourning inspiration returned, restoring my faith in winter's white solace consoled by your voice in muse whisperings, silhouetted memories translated to verse prayers to poetry, scripture to rhyme,seducing the page, haunting exquisite every line For all that you mercifully left behind in your dusking persuasion, with each breath of a moment's passing you became the star's illumination you, my love ... became the sky's inspiration” Again, some of the best lines of the poem and again italics on “haunting exquisite” is well placed. (Think I’m catching onto this style a bit...lol). “I dreamt of you last night rising from the mist: for a moment your being reflected every water drop every tear I deeply inhaled your solar rhythms between ocean and sky sun and star, earth and seas there is no distance in first blossom of spring in gentle fall of snow tapping rain upon my roof there is no distance between you and I softly night awakens in her amber phase” . What else can I say? Ya’ll did it about as well as it can be done. There were only a couple verses where I was sure what was Lauren’s and what was JM’s. Hard to disguise those litterbations... Knowing a bit of the story behind this write gave me an appreciation of it’s subject that did add a lot to my enjoyment of it, not to say it doesn’t stand well on it’s own. They were very fortunate to have known you, as you were them and well, like I said before...that line about remembering your soul said it all. And ya’ll really should try writing together again...say something “distilled”. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ok Duncan you made me cry with your response....sigh...very lucky indeed and thank you for taking time to choose some of my favorite words as well.....of course I speak of JM there... she is lovely....and so very special....ok I ramble....lol thank you ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I can't add much as I am late but I can say this, when two ladies with wings of gentleness rub together and speak the voice of their heart and soul, it is bound to move you. All I can say ladies, is that I truly was moved by the purity of love I read in this. I suppose that is what recollections are for, making a spirit feel just the biggest hug, and for some reason this butterfly too feels a slight hug from your collaboration. Well done, and do I dare ask for "more please?" These stuck in my mind and throat: consoled by your voice in muse whisperings, silhouetted memories translated to verse prayers to poetry, scripture to rhyme,seducing the page, haunting exquisite every line For all that you mercifully left behind in your dusking persuasion, with each breath of a moment's passing you became the star's illumination you, my love ... became the sky's inspiration” Now considering I read you both so much I saw the odd place where I could tell JM in there, I thought until I had to say, "well maybe that was Lauren?" Well done, well done indeed you two! Today I'm only moving clouds, tomorrow I'll try mountains. |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
you are poets both of you. there's nothing that i can say to you that you don't already know. *awestruck* through the ravages of sleeplessness lies the comfort of the night |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I'm sitting here with my mouth open in awe...... This wonderful, beautiful writing has made me speechless for real!!!! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Mysteria~ hugssss ebay lady.... this was a pleasure to do....we appreciate your time....thank you much .... ~~ Midndightson~ what a sweet compliment....thank you ~~ Ethel~ awwww sweet lady, so good to see your smile here....touching reply...thank you ~~ Muwwwaaahhhss and HUGSSSS for all the heartfelt comments, compliments and for taking time to visit these words... ~ ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Please add my humble thanks to Laurens for your generous replies.... I thank you all for coming by.... Duncan???? you reallllly did read the whole thing!!!!! Thank you for such an indepth response....almost reads as long as a moth confession. Sharon ... yes, you know too...you have a lovely butterfly muse of your own. thanks sweet lady!! MS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HEY YOU...whats up groovy guy...been a long time since you've done a fly by...hows life in the fast lane. Ethel ... thank you...youre such a doll. thanks to all for your kind replies... Lauren...sweets..Im gonna have to hire you for my PR agent...you make me look so much better than I am. I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Have you ever sat outside and observed two butterflies in flutter, following each other's lead in unison and perfect rhythm? I can't even begin to tell you how many times I had to catch my breath while reading this. You two made the sun dance with such sensitive warmth. Thank you for this beauty, you are both so very lovely here. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is an exquisite weaving of strings straight from the hearts of two major talents. *S* To choose my favorite passages would be to repost the poem... Excellent work! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lori.... thank you again, for such a lovely reply...it reads like poetry. TY girlie.Ruth...any post of mine sorely misses you...an exquisite from you is good enough for me. thank you groovy girl. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
smiling....you are both so beautiful and I already knew this would be pure grace and eloquence. Well done my friends... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you Donna...Lauren brings out things in my pen that I didnt know it was capable of. She is indeed eloquent and graceful, in pen and spirit. Thank you for the lovely reply girlie. thanks again to all, for your kind replies and to Lauren for all that she inspires in me. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah I found it! Was in the mood for you butterfly girls this morning - a beautiful sunny day, and this read plus a great coffee is just what I needed. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
missing my butterfly ....miss reading you... hugssss dear.... just had to come in a read this again.... And so it those we live with |
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