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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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in the precarious balance of will on the edge the question looms build or destroy? or shall I resign myself to walk, a shadow stretched thin beneath a dying sun? in the silence that lays between my waning faith, and your indifference blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines *shrugs, my writing is a little off, struggling lately and i needs my sleep. g'nite |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines'' ~ dear lord what a haunting image....you make it seem so real....good to see you have returned home...  ~~**~~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Whoa...  Bello.Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. (by Virginia Woolf) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! *sigh* those last lines are incredible! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines cool lines stop shrugging, youre hunching over, stand up tall, poet....... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines" Those lines were closer to the bone than I can explain. They brought back a nervous tic. Think I'll go out for a walk, maybe it will rain. *smile* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh my goodness what imagery !! Amazing, and going into my library! Stay awake and write some more ! Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"in the silence that lays between my waning faith, and your indifference" My fav lines were what Icy picked...but these ones are cool in that they remind me of something/someone. You did more than good... Don't doubt it. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines" ~ I have to admit that these lines scared the feathers right off of my wings! lol  Hi, Raph! Good to read you again! ~ and this write really does deserve a title, Dear Insomniac! Sending you a sleeping potion that should help you on those sleepless nights in Seattle, I mean "Toronto"! lol Warm hugs, Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
or shall I resign myself to walk, a shadow stretched thin beneath a dying sun? Caro Raffaele, it's just the moment between wake and sleep when you are more receptive to "hear the whispers from the muse". This is very good! Abbracci. Margherita  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I feel like I know this one. Like i've read it before? I'm probably just imagining it. Perhaps I'm just familiar with your writings. Sick n tired of you more like. ha. or shall I resign myself to walk, a shadow stretched thin beneath a dying sun? This makes me imagine the world completely abandoned/ruined, waiting to die. a bit lord of the rings esque. love it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"in the precarious balance of will on the edge the question looms build or destroy?" It's all the same energy, ain't it? (and yep, you bring me back to thoughts of the evolution of religions, yet again) smiling atchoo. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"blue skies fall to black as angels dangle in the powerlines" WOW!! Your writing 'off'??? NEVER!! Love this! Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
cool write...dynamic imagery and excellent word choices...more sculpted than scripted...loved it!!!! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks everybody, the 'angels' line was something I had lying around but never liked what i'd written around it Gem you called it, it's in a poem I posted awhile ago, on a winter's day and K, as soon as i wrote those lines I though of you, knew you'd understand |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I read this before going to bed last night..it totally blew me away Bello... and reading it again this morning... I'm still blown away. A fabulous write, fabulous imagery. Keep em a comin Bel.  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks bella you're the best 'Quantum materiae materietur marmota monax si marmota |
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