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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-04-06 09:19 PM


The anger is so wearying
I want to ask him if he knows
that it's not this--
nor is it that--

it's just the way
it goes...

Carry on, oh carry on
in the name of Dean.
"You're tearing me apart!"
I scream--
he doesn't get the joke.

Brando
he replaced James Dean,
then Marlon grew too fat to pout
and even Eminem will soon
need something new to bitch about.

It's just the fact
that no one knows...

the full effects of full moon phase
and the way that time plays games
underneath the skin.



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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2004-04-06 09:25 PM


Karen, this is a WOW poem..absolutely love it...

and this..

Eminem will soon
need something new to bitch about.


This.. made me smile.. he will indeed.

adding this to my library.



M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-04-06 09:29 PM


"It's just the fact
that no one knows...

the full effects of full moon phase
and the way that time plays games
underneath the skin."

It sure does Karen...it sure does.
Looooove this one!
Hugs pretty lady~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Juju
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In your dreams
3 posted 2004-04-06 09:46 PM


It was different. I like thinkers.

-Juju

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In Your Poetic Mind
4 posted 2004-04-06 09:54 PM


you have such a talent
wowzer Karen!!

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
5 posted 2004-04-06 09:57 PM


I just love the way you come up with this stuff!!!  As every other thing I've read by you this is Great!  Love it.

jwesley

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2004-04-06 10:54 PM


You remind me of my Crepe of Skin...
only you do it so much better!

Nightshade
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just out of reach
7 posted 2004-04-06 10:58 PM


Carry on, oh carry on
in the name of Dean.
"You're tearing me apart!"
I scream--
he doesn't get the joke.


Yes, James Dean. Are you as tormented as he was in that film dear Karen?  Maybe we all are with the moon in full.   hugs, Chrislane

Duncan
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8 posted 2004-04-06 11:07 PM


"It's just the fact
that no one knows...

the full effects of full moon phase
and the way that time plays games
underneath the skin."

What timing.  I was needing something to blame for my recent state of mind...  
Hiya K.

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2004-04-07 12:27 PM


I want to ask him if he knows
that it's not this--
nor is it that--

it's just the way
it goes...
~~~
It's just the fact
that no one knows...

the full effects of full moon phase
and the way that time plays games
underneath the skin.

===========================


OH, me thinks YOU know.
What I know is I love what your rhyme does under my skin.
I hope you know just how very cool this poem is...

yeah...you know...
how can you not...
you wrote this..........

Brando
he replaced James Dean,
then Marlon grew too fat to pout
and even Eminem will soon
need something new to bitch about.


you rock baby...and it rolls me.

Home is a feeling I buried in you ...
I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ...

M.E.

EternitysHorizon
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Twilight's Orchestra
10 posted 2004-04-07 12:45 PM


Moon child dream
glory cometh
with stars ablaze
and the veracity
to see
all comes from underneath...

nicely done

"High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy."

passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2004-04-07 03:33 AM


you can write about anything and make it cool
Susan Caldwell
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Florida
12 posted 2004-04-07 10:19 AM




Just...



"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Margherita
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Eternity
13 posted 2004-04-07 11:48 AM


You state a truth that can't be denied.
Smart poetess, very well done!
Love, Margherita

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2004-04-07 12:31 PM


Yep.

It's a sad day when my own angst wears me out.

But then maybe that's a good thing.

(Eh, Susan? )

Love to all with hugs.

(It's best not take the moods too seriously at this point in life. heh heh heh)

Paula Finn
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missouri
15 posted 2004-04-08 01:10 PM


Ya know it does no good to ask...they only hear the words they want and its never the ones they truly need to listen to...hugs girlie
ThisDiamond
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16 posted 2004-04-08 03:26 PM


Ya do some powerful word play my gal.
Enjoyed.
TD

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17 posted 2004-04-08 04:07 PM


Karen...Sounds like you need to suck a few MUD BUG HEADS and kill a few BUDS. Hope things get better. Oh yah how you been doing?
Long time no see. Are you ready for another HOT New Orleans Summer???? Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Local Rebel
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Southern Abstentia
18 posted 2004-04-08 11:10 PM


don't step on my blue suede shoes...

you can do anything... for love

but I won't do that!


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19 posted 2004-04-09 02:31 AM


the full effects of full moon phase
and the way that time plays games
underneath the skin."

And I took this from you as exactly the way I am feeling - so thank you Cajun Queen, as I am sick of this myself.

MGROVES
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california
20 posted 2004-04-09 11:43 AM





    


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
21 posted 2004-04-09 11:27 PM



Second read...and library filing...

Dark Angel
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22 posted 2004-04-10 12:10 PM


I'm in for a second reading too
oh and how this......

The anger is so wearying
I want to ask him if he knows
that it's not this--
nor is it that--

it's just the way
it goes...


speaks to me right now... sigh.

Gorgeous.

Mxx

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Larry C
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23 posted 2004-04-10 12:29 PM


How you distill life so well! A talent which I so admire. You are the bomb sweet friend.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
24 posted 2004-04-10 01:28 PM


Grinning at you
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