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Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
Fading What happened to my smile... Did everything just fade? What happened to the times, The memories we've made? Hope has disappeared Pain and grief collide Reaching for the friends That now have left my side Years pass through my mind Stumbling through my heart Chasing you away Pulling us apart Did it hurt you, too? Did you cry today? Searching for the truth We might find the way Where did my smile go? Reach out for my hand Whisper to my soul Help me understand Moving on is hard Your cheeks can't hide the stain You know I always tried To love you through the pain But you just turned away And then...so did I Forgetting how to care I didn't say goodbye A rock they called my heart A gem they called my soul A golden chance was lost To keep it in control Where has my smile gone? What pain have I went through? You took my heart, my friend Then took my smile, too. Andrew/J*M |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well constructed plea... In touch with best friend, and how they hold our heart...the write is good to compell discussion of the feeling contained within it. You are very talented in your writing and in the delivery of the understanding. Much better than a slamming door. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely penned Andrew and much enjoyed. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A rock they called my heart A gem they called my soul A golden chance was lost To keep it in control Very well done! Enjoyed. Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Spot on. Liked it - very good Dave |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I'm definetely feeling this poem! *I'm saving this* I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Darker Season, First, let me welcome you to Passions, a place I really enjoy. The people here are great, full of talent, sincerity, and watch out for the humor! Some send humor just when it's needed most. I enjoyed reading your poem. It brought old heartache back for a few minutes, but time took care of that one. You express yourself well in writing. I'm looking forward to reading your work. Sadelite |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand...so well |
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