Open Poetry #31 |
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Of Strike and Srars |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla ![]() |
Of Strike and Stars I struck a rock in simmers boil Racked the wind into a whorl Flung my arms up to the sky And then I shed a tear in cry Frustration paint my face in red Silence mourned me like the dead But butterflies they clapped their wings And even birds and insect things I thank them with a bend of neck I even did a genuflect And said as much in prides orate To thank them for their concentrate I did an encore rhymed in true Like puffs of wind into the blue And tolled the bells within my well To spread the words and said farewell It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But butterflies they clapped their wings And even birds and insect things I thank them with a bend of neck I even did a genuflect And said as much in prides orate To thank them for their concentrate =================================== *smiling at you* ![]() loving this tribute to Mother Nature Sy-babers...ya got some great lines in this gem of pen...I bet there were some moths clapping along with the butterflies. *L* ![]() Love your closing couplet too. *ww* ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Nothing like sleeping under a blanket of stars. Well done, Sy. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep" Love this ending couplet Sy... Such a warm thought.... Lovey lovey write m'friend. ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You simply reach for the stars in every penning~ ![]() AND ... you touch them every time~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I did an encore rhymed in true Like puffs of wind into the blue And tolled the bells within my well To spread the words and said farewell ~*~ See? All we need is that one last rhyme to make us happy... Bless you for all of them. ![]() |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
loved this star gazing write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sy~ This one really touched me. It reminded me of the world in which my nephew lives. Thank you for painting it with pretty colors. ![]() "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
A sleep under the stars makes us all feel free. Nicely captured in this write, I loves the feelings this one evoked! ^*-Kimberley-*^ ![]() "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Mr. T.! ~ I can see it all now! You on a cliff top flinging your arms up to the sky and whipping the wind into a whorl. You genuflect to your adoring audience of appreciative birds and insect things. Then after your illustrious oration, you slip into a peaceful slumber beneath a canopy of stars! ![]() Angel hugs 'n kisses, EA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
'Whorl' is a new one to me Sy but I like it. Glad I'm not playing poetry scrabble with you......... Nicely done! Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
don't know if you struck a rock, but one thing I do know is you most certainly ROCK! outstanding write...good good morning Sy How are ya? Hope all is well and you and yours has a lovely day, thanks for the 3rd cup of coffee this moring, very aromatic! ![]() |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"I struck a rock in simmers boil" What a interesting contrasting image and play on words. I liked your poem very much. Sadie |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
It’s then I truly went to sleep And covered me with stars for keep'''' ~ what a peaceful way to fall asleep... ![]() ~~**~~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Well I was hoping one moth would. LOL WWRS ![]() ![]() ![]() scorpio Thanks for the well done. Nancy, Thanks for the lovely. ![]() Marge, Huglets back you sweet thing. Sunshine, You are just a love. Midnitesun, Love your reply. Susan, Thank you, hugs back. Kim, You are a sweetheart. Earth Angel, Now that will get you a hug and a kiss. Eric, LOL thank you my friend. LeeJ Good morning to you and waving back. Sadie, I like your reply even more. Greeneyes, Sweet comment thank you dear. |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice ![]() |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vandana Thank you dear. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Well, those stars do inspire you in quite an extraordinary way, dear Seymour! Love, Margherita ![]() |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Margherita Thank you sweety for the read and eply. |
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