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Standing in Wait
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Standing in Wait |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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She stands on the corner, waiting. Wearing her fast food green. Hoping she will not be forgotten. Some days are easier than others, and she is better able to accept what she has been dealt. Not today. I see her shift her weight from one foot to another, while squinting to see if the next car is it. I wonder if they understand the sacrifices she makes. Or if they just take it for granted, and demand more. I know her thoughts and want to scream to her. Run don’t look back! Make a new start. But the moment is lost as she climbs into a car Filled with stagnant air and adjusts her breathing "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (04-05-2004 03:14 PM).] |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, this is a really great write. I felt as if I were standing there watching her, too.... and seeing much more than her outward appearance. Hugs, Ethel |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done susan.. nicely captured |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is a very touching write Susan. Makes one grateful for the life we have. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Great work on this, Susan. I think you and I could have a great time, just people-watching. ah, someday perhaps. It's good to read you again, lovie. I missed you.  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She stands on the corner, waiting. Wearing her fast food green. Hoping she will not be forgotten. ~*~ I understand the poem, but the first of it had me thinking something else in the beginning. I'm sure I'll figure it out. Good read, Susan. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Susan..makes you want to run and hug her..tell her don't go.. Extremely well written and much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Well written and needed Dave |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Excellent-- propelled me onto the scene! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
made me think... You did a fine job painting the picture with your well selected choice of words. I enjoyed this, though sad. Sadie |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Fantastic writing Susan, know quite a few people who i wish would run as well |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you are good at people-watching and describing life |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all! and Karen? Let's go!!! But we need to do it there because it would be like another world to me...oh I am all giddy thinking about it!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Amazing clarity! Thank you for sharing this. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Having good powers of observation is one of the abilities of a good writer! I suppose that makes you a good writer, Dear Susan!   Linda |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
^*~Susan~*^ Wonderful write again.. I could see the woman, your use of imagery and descriptive technique is beautifully mastered.  ^*~Kimberley~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Me too,I love people watching. I sit in the middle of town sometimes, just watching people pass by. I think i get it from my mother, but she loves listening to other peoples conversations I tell her thats just nosey. and then i join in. You captured this just right Susan. so sad. I've missed you muchos! xx |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you. pssst...Gemma? So glad to see you "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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