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Some Long Ago Invincible
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Some Long Ago Invincible |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Some Long Ago Invincible Her dark hair and the moonlight Exotic breath on your lips a place of water that leaked on to the cobblestones not so treacherous arm in arm you both thought you might be invincible But the bombs were exploding a deep rumble inside the sanctuary I can hear your heart beat across the years even though I know you still stand there by a tall tree with the fire leaping behind you next to her next to me in some long ago invincible |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh my goodness!! WOW WOW you certainly grabbed me with absolute emotion here.... i guess it just struck a chord with me today  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Exotic breath on your lips a place of water that leaked on to the cobblestones not so treacherous arm in arm you both thought you might be invincible" And in that thought lies the reason for being. Really enjoyed this Martie...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible writing, as always |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You always manage to get to me.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Intense emotion here, so beautifully shared. Love, Margherita  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Totally beautiful ... Martiesque Moment~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I can hear your heart beat across the years even though I know you still stand there by a tall tree with the fire leaping behind you next to her next to me Martie, you grace these pages in your very own wonderful way! This is heartfelt and so beautiful. You are truly a joy to read. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Martie, there is a tenderness behind all your words that I enjoy M |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wondermous Martie...wondermous. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Somehow, this strikes me as a very sad write. It could just be me, and my mood... but it is so like you to make me fell the tug and pull... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I read this as a wandering soul lost and looking, this is how poetry should affect....you do it like no other... ~~**~~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You do have a gift...Truly. Your imagery is unparalleled. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Exotic breath on your lips a place of water that leaked on to the cobblestones not so treacherous arm in arm you both thought you might be invincible ======================================== your pen is invincible ... awesome imagery poetess Martie-girl. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - a wonderful write - so full of emotion - I too got a strong wistfullness inside me as I read...loved it as usual - Paul |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Awesome write Martie...very much enjoy your style. You DO have a magic pen!! Hugs~ ~Before befriending butterflies |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
ahh,Martie, a lovely thought of somewhere in time..very well done...very gentle smile |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is very...touching. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I love the pattern that expresses itself in this -- it is completely enclosed as a poem yet the theme is open-ended, beginning and end echoing in theme and imagery even though there is so much motion within that thoughts literally run past the end of the poem itself. You've created a tiny world here, and it is both strong and beautiful -- the way your poems always do. This is simply excellent. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Wow! What can I say? I believe I understand this very well. I enjoyed your well expressed poem. , Sadie |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
As always, beautiful words Martie |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Martie, I always love the "stories" you tell... I'm so glad I got to read you today. Take care sweet lady. Amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...as tho' time stood still... EA |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"But the bombs were exploding a deep rumble inside the sanctuary" This line made a huge impact on the rest of the poem! There was a huge contrast between the warmth and loving beginning and then this shivering truth! ^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^ Well written I thoroughly enjoyed it! ^*~Kimberley~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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