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Kicking Kim
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Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2004-04-03 08:54 AM



You're beauty
impeccable.
Immaculate complexion.
You feel the need
to masquerade,
too afraid
to frown.
Upon your blank canvas beauty
belies a painted treat.
Your synthetic smile,
hiding your humility
behind this futility.
Disposable laughter,
drowning out
the echo of reality.
Up with the elite,
its hard to compete.
But someday soon
you'll take a line
to numb your pine.
When you awake
reality will be knocking at the door.

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

© Copyright 2004 Kimberley Mason - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

1 posted 2004-04-03 09:03 AM


Very fine writing Kim..enjoyed..

Thank you..

Goldenrose.

''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''-  Dalai Lama

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
2 posted 2004-04-03 02:03 PM


I enjoyed this, Kim.
Fisherman
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since 2000-04-14
Posts 46

3 posted 2004-04-03 02:33 PM


Nice effort, enjoyed.
Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11
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4 posted 2004-04-07 09:54 PM


I don't know how to comment on this one.  I liked it, as it PErfectLY described a few people I know regardless whether they were homecoming queens!  And then again, I've known homecoming queens that are very nice people, without fascades.  
   You carved out this character well.  I enjoyed.  
                  Sadie

Darker Season
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since 2004-04-01
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Wisconsin
5 posted 2004-04-07 10:52 PM


Interesting topic with great execution.  You painted such a vivid character through your words.  Nice work
Kicking Kim
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Cloud Cucko Land!
6 posted 2004-04-10 05:41 AM


^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^

Thankyou all for your wonderful feedback.

...I do not know any Homecoming Queens
at all because I live in England and schools
and colleges here do not have such awards...
We don't even have cheerleaders!!
It is generally considered too elitist.

However, this is basically based on a few
people that I have come to know and dislike!


^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^*~*^

Glad you all enjoyed!

^*~Kimberley~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

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