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zippi
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0 posted 2004-04-02 06:46 PM



Windows to the soul...these two.
Midnight black or baby blue.
Earthy brown or ocean green,
Shaded somewhere in between.
Brilliant, shining orbs of light,
keepers of the gift of sight.
Oracles of ancient history,
Dancing globes of charm and mystery.
Filled with tears, cast down in shame.
Divulging secrets, casting blame.
Curious... they dart and leap,
Even in your deepest sleep.
Reacting to the slightest sounds,
These sentinels survey the grounds.
Twins of truth, betraying lies.
To know the soul, look in the eyes.
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Grover
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1 posted 2004-04-02 06:49 PM


You're keepin' an eye on us. Great write!
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2004-04-02 07:04 PM


Fantastic writing...James
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3 posted 2004-04-05 11:08 AM


so poingant and true...lovely write my little friend!
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4 posted 2004-04-05 11:57 AM


Excellent write zippi!  
The eyes are definitely the window from    
which the light pours from our soul.

~enjoyed~

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5 posted 2004-04-05 02:36 PM


Zippi~

'These sentinels survey the grounds.
Twins of truth, betraying lies.
To know the soul, look in the eyes'


I liked the all of it ...
but this thought certainly stood out to me~

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JL
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6 posted 2004-04-05 02:54 PM


Zippi:
What an imagination you have.  This is a marvelous write.  Especially for Lee J.
I must say, you are indeed an exceptionally great poet!
JL

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8 posted 2004-04-06 06:44 AM


^*-Zippi-*^

WOW, I really wasn't ready for this wondrous write.
This blew me away.
It is all in the eyes,
you can give the whole game away with a simple blink.
I loved the line...
"Divulging secrets, casting blame."
This is oh so true.
Eyes decide your feelings,
and reveal your secrets all at once!!

Brilliantly captured.

^*-Kimberley-*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

zenny
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9 posted 2004-04-06 07:11 AM


yup... Eyes are the windows to our soul... can be beautiful or painful to see what's in it... can go both ways..

loved reading this
*zenny*

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10 posted 2004-04-06 09:10 PM


Wow... very amazing write!! I love the way you did this. Sorta unique.

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11 posted 2004-04-06 09:43 PM


Excellent, Zippi.  Welcome to Passions.  I look forward to reading more of your work.
                Sadie

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12 posted 2004-04-09 12:57 PM


the eyes are our windows to the soul. this was excellant


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13 posted 2004-04-09 01:09 PM


This is a fantastic write which I agree with totally!! Enjoyed. Chris

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iliana
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14 posted 2004-04-11 01:24 AM


zippi -- this is the best eyes poem I've ever read!   .....jo
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