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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
Was your house up for sale sleepless nights, look so pale embarked on a trip to a foreign place untied from the reality of the human race Worked to succeed in a land of laws that favoured some who sharpened claws for the purification of a selected race the land grew strange you weren't in place Out from a culture of the veil in procession with those who wail.... as if accused then released on bail was a question of what cultures fail... Cause processions ran on night trains conducted by orchestra leaders of fame whose music wafted through the clanky din through walled tunnels where man was thin.. Masses carted to stations as part of the deal short of food for lack of straight meals concentrated in blocks where 'work makes free' when the procession halts all wails must flee... And of the train conductor in the night running the gauntlet into broad daylight did he question the system about the cargo he carried or continues to transport the disfavoured and harried. [This message has been edited by wordwizard (01-30-2004 08:32 PM).] |
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gadfly4you Junior Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 37 |
Very well written! ..Really enjoyed it! I love the play on words, "concentrated" ..and "wail".....just to choose a few....it cuts well, very sharp |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
powerful write |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Exciting, original... very well written! Grover. |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
the 'cutting well' is a litmus test for me appreciate your feedback all of you |
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