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Open Poetry #31

Must Get Out Of This Place

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

0 posted 2004-03-30 02:22 PM

Must Get Out Of This Place

running-- the ecstacy of escape
adrenalin gushing wildfire

voracious multiplying of
evil thoughts of glory

but it's futile hiding in the tunnel
at rush hour.

©2004 Grover Gall

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2004-03-30 04:32 PM

There is no escaping possible ... better face the truth.
That's what I get and ... short breath.
Such suspense.
Love, Margherita

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2004-03-30 04:35 PM

This gave me a picture of a poor guy trying to escape the rat race, right into a traffic jam.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2004-03-30 05:03 PM

Great images forced from the reader's mind to fulfill the purpose of this write.....Enjoyable!

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2004-03-30 05:43 PM

and yet, sometimes a "crowd" is a great camouflage.

I liked the surreal flavor of the panic/anxiety that you captured with this.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2004-03-30 06:19 PM

Believe it was the "Animals" that said so much so many years ago..."We gotta get out of this place." James

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

6 posted 2004-03-30 08:18 PM

oh yes, panic attack central

loved how you pass that feeling onto the reader

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-03-31 04:02 AM

I feel this and like it

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

8 posted 2004-03-31 07:48 AM

this reminds me of Vietnam...

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

9 posted 2004-03-31 09:30 AM

Fantastic, high energy....Your images are quite evocative, especially in that last line...being a New York City dweller, you got me right there...! ~P

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