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ChemicalRepose
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0 posted 2004-03-28 04:04 PM


My screams release, from beneath this cavern.
Surrounding mountains, deceiving, my eyes fill with passion, but
I can't sit here alone, not for too long.
Kneeling, silent, broken, and vibrant, waiting for this sky to fall,
to fill this chasm, So I can cross, and be reborn.

I'm weak, and survive only because you tell me to.
I can feel your presence, landing in my thoughts.
I've been drained, so feed me some more silence.
I am too weak and scared to find solace without you,
and I am prepared to follow you.

God won't you silence me, and eliminate these dissident thoughts, they keep stalking me.
Speak, and free my defiance, open and consume my suspicion.
Feed my weak, diseased beliefs.  

Thoughts are broken now, and I'm choking on my competence
and waiting for your guidance.
Don't let your light miss me
Let me concede, these beliefs I need.
As I plant this seed, to grow, you lead,
and relieve me, their masquerade? I believe.

© Copyright 2004 Ben - All Rights Reserved
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Gaia
1 posted 2004-03-28 04:15 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Sounds like quite a battle going on, lots of intensity in the imagery.
Hope you stay and enjoy all the variety Passions has to offer.  

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-03-28 04:33 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Take a look around at all our forums
and most of all enjoy your stay!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Please check your email for a special greeting.

~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

Grover
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3 posted 2004-03-28 04:36 PM


Good first post... loads of creative energy here, great imagery, metaphors. Welcome to Passions! Grover.
Kahlil
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4 posted 2004-03-28 04:39 PM


CR:  this is intense and filled with turmoil.  Lots I can identify with here. Welcome to Passions!!!  
I'm looking forward to more of your writings and hope you will enjoy cruising around and having a look at all the artistry here.
~K~

Kahlil
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5 posted 2004-03-28 04:42 PM


P.S.  do I know you??
bslicker
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6 posted 2004-03-28 04:42 PM


Welcome to Passions
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

ChemicalRepose
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7 posted 2004-03-28 05:04 PM


I dont believe I know you, but maybe.  Whats your name?  And where are you from?  I'm Ben and from New York.

Thank all of you for the positive comments.  I hope all of you enjoy my other writings.  

1slick_lady
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8 posted 2004-03-28 05:22 PM


welcome to the passion
passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-03-28 05:31 PM


Welcome to Passions! Make yourself at home!
Martie
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10 posted 2004-03-28 05:50 PM


CR

Welcome to Passions.  I enjoyed reading your first post and look forward to more.

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11 posted 2004-03-28 06:18 PM


Ben~
Welcome to Passions~

This is a wonderfully intense entry into this circle of poets and friends~

I look forward to more~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

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just out of reach
12 posted 2004-03-28 06:25 PM



WELCOME TO PASSIONS
ENJOYED YOUR FIRST POST
HUGS, CHRIS

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13 posted 2004-03-28 09:09 PM


this one runs deep into the painful places, hoping you find solace

and Welcome to Passions

steavenr
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14 posted 2004-03-28 09:43 PM


interesting first post...welcome to passions.
ChemicalRepose
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15 posted 2004-03-28 09:45 PM


What does the opening folder by my post mean?
bslicker
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16 posted 2004-03-28 09:53 PM


That it is your first orignal post, please read your email.

bernie
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A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

ChemicalRepose
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17 posted 2004-03-28 10:00 PM


ahhh, thanks
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18 posted 2004-03-28 11:01 PM


i too must welcome you to passions
felt alot of pain and turmoil here. i totally understand. i live with a person who lives in the land of denial. it hurts to see the way he decieves himself

            


iliana
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19 posted 2004-03-29 03:12 AM


Intense writing!  Welcome to Passions, ChemicalRepose.  Sometimes I scream so loud I can't hear the answer....but it's there, somewhere, I believe.  
nn
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20 posted 2004-03-29 02:40 PM


What a nice poem. Liked it very much
Sadelite
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21 posted 2004-03-29 02:47 PM


Welcome to Passions.   There are a lot of good people here and talent.  One can easily get hooked on writing here.  I hope you enjoy.  I could tell your heart was in your first post.  Take care,
           Sadie (Sadelite)

nn
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22 posted 2004-03-29 02:49 PM


What a very nice poem. Liked it very much
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