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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-03-26 06:57 PM


I looked to the shore beyond
A bow rising
Water gently caressed the thick stones
Held by sand
I felt my foot
Watching
A blue water
On a grainey shore
Everything had nothing
I sang a "Seeker's" song

A remembrance of love

For those days


and maybe

dave

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DavePage
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1 posted 2004-03-26 07:07 PM


This is for my wife

Dave

Grover
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2 posted 2004-03-26 08:56 PM


It's always great when a husband expresses love to his wife-- especially by writing poetry!
iliana
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3 posted 2004-03-26 09:48 PM


I liked this, Dave.  It shows the frailty of love.     ......jo
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4 posted 2004-03-26 11:11 PM


I liked this as well
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5 posted 2004-03-27 03:03 AM


A sweet gesture-poetry is stimulating.  I hope she likes it.  It has a certain call.

"I felt my foot watching blue water on a grainey shore."   Very creative filling many senses.  Thank you.
          Sadie

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6 posted 2004-03-27 09:37 PM


say it aint so jo
please dont go
weve only just begun

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7 posted 2004-03-28 12:19 PM


nothing to inflict, no poetic punishment can match the one reality metes out to us

poignant

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8 posted 2004-03-28 01:03 PM


Very poignant write Dave.
Enjoyed.
Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
   Has held me in the same embrace ~

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9 posted 2004-03-28 01:55 PM


I enjoyed this
MGROVES
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10 posted 2004-03-28 02:25 PM


a beautiful expression of love
thanks for sharing


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11 posted 2004-03-28 06:53 PM


Dave~
I happen to like this very, very much~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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