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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-03-24 04:51 PM


My real thoughts for the Man

Coming down

and never been anywhere

Church of Scotland Hostel

Listen

The Who
Born in Shepherd's Bush myself
And still listen

Walking feet of pavement
Smelling friend

chicken cooking

Managed nuthing the night before

Smelt a feeling begin

Learned a lot

Words don't need saying

Man in Black Sang Me

And the World

Still listening

Dave

© Copyright 2004 Dave Page - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2004-03-24 05:28 PM


Interesting little ramble....Not sure where you're going with it but it's fun trying to figure out where.

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

iliana
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2 posted 2004-03-26 02:28 AM


Amazing write, Dave.  You must be a musician.   .......jo
A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2004-03-26 02:37 AM


At first..Your name appeared to me like Jimmy Page and David Coverdale...

So I have thought you were musically related anyway....

I can always hear your poems as songs...

~ARH
love and hugs

Open your eyes, open your mind, open your heart, let me come in and show you love.....~ARH

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2004-03-26 08:14 AM


and so it goes.....
the beat goes on

Soleil Noir
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5 posted 2004-03-26 08:43 AM



I've been reading you for some time now...
your reminiscent thoughts always
pleasure my soul, that you honor those
that gave to you.

Toerag
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Ala bam a
6 posted 2004-03-26 09:02 AM


interesting write dave....I came down once...didn't like it....but it's costing me my retirement and my life....but what the hell?....
LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-03-26 10:57 AM


Walking feet of pavement
Smelling friend

chicken cooking

Managed nuthing the night before

Smelt a feeling begin

Learned a lot

the warmth of this education, streams from your pen, and I feel friends all around you...giving you enthusiasum and understanding....

It is in the core of our being, from then to now, which draws our spirit closer then before...bringing us to a very rare glimpse of what really was and now is.

Lovely read David...your writing is an entire meal....Grade A Prime Rib!

HopeS
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8 posted 2004-03-26 11:35 AM


learned a lot and still listening ... hey Dave me too . By the way if this is "The Who" as in group , giving my age away I saw them live in the sixties

Hope

DavePage
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9 posted 2004-03-26 12:37 PM


ethome
  
Fair comment

It almost seems too easy to just launch into some style and words that look something, so I suppose I am trying not to write using anything that is some kind of standard for me, but just allowing words and images and no I'm not taking anything before anyone asks

I was based in Faslane on HMS Maidstone in the early 60s as a 17 year old and escaped to the Church of Scotland Hostel in Helensburgh at the weekends

When I heard Mr Cash some years later, sing Sunday Morning coming Down, I felt I had been there.

Inside the hostel of course I pumped my money into a Juke box playing My Generation by the Who.

iliana

I was hauled out of the church assembly for singing because no-one could sound that bad.

Even paid to mime in the choir.

Spirit is there, I think I can sing but I seem to be on my own there



A Romantic Heart
I do tend to write them as songs

Classic for me was someone who said I had to listen to your poem as rap, before I could understand it

inkedgoddess

Ink

You are probably one of the few people who dance to work


Soleil Noir

The problem is we all end up eventually as a series of memories

Early childhood - someone else's

Mad stupidity while we try to prove we are idiots - still on someone elses

Unless we get out - we are probably still living someone else's memories and not building our own

It is nice to admit to the influences on your life

I feel happier doing it


Toerag

Toerag

When did you mean to retire anyway


LeeJ

Learned a lot

Yet someone else would call me a loner who can sit there and just enjoy the company of people.

I do have this habit when working away of taking up residence in restaurants I like

Tum Nuk Thai Restaurant in Halifax UK, and The Royal in Old Amstelveen in the Netherlands have my recommendation

The Tum allowed me to sit a couch until the early hours of the morning talking to people and the Royal used to play small English bowling between the tables.


HopeS

Hope you ageless

Dave


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