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bashlovesemma Junior Member
since 2003-09-23
Posts 25 |
My poem is about love, places and how people defeat the point of livin, distroying on another... I dont post on here often, but here goes, please comment, good and bad... here goes.. The wonders of the world, This world we live in, Places we want to see, Places we want to live in, Waking up to the Peaceful sounds of birds, in the morning Sunshine, Waking up to a the lovely sun, Overlooking the ocean shores, The clean look of the sand beneath the waves, Stroll along the beach, holding hand in hand with your lover, Lay on the sand, watching the sun set, Walking in the small waves, The way the world works, It really sucks, Lovers, can love one another, One more than the other, But things can be changed, situations can be stirred, I love you Danielle, I want to live this world together, The peaceful world, None of this nastiness of the people around us, The people who put us down, We shouldn’t let people like that get us down Life is so cruel to those who care about each other, The people who put each other down are the ones, Who in life, God will be forced to punished and they will be marked as “Unforgiven” We should live as “Stigmatized” not giving a second thought, About what people think, It’s a game of minds, but be sure I’m one step ahead of the game. The world I want to live in, and with the ones I love, friends and family, Is a fantasy, Living somewhere quite, Sun - setting moments, Sun - raising moments, Having a blast, Free from the pain at last, The future a head of us now, Peaceful thoughts, Loving thoughts, Us together, Forever, Sean |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Go with your lady in whatever world you choose The courage do that is more important, although what is courage against a gang motivated by whatever means You speak of something "Stigmatized” and for that you may have to face the courage of the mob Take care Dave |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
you must think about what you have just said here. you say the ones who treat you wrongly are the ones who are "unforgiven" in the eyes of god. but you must ask yourself, why do they treat you wrongly? probably because nobody forgives them and remains friends with them. there, you see, lies the answer. indeed, they are unforgiven. why dont YOU forgive them? |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
You are a sensitive person with the gift of expressing yourself. Take time to get involved more at Passions. Hone your skills by following the example of others. Above all, practice forgiveness.  |
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