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Building Differences
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Building Differences |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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A memory: side-by-side at the art table, sleeves rolled back on blouse and shirt, constructing popsicle stick houses beneath the stilted brow of Mrs. Jenkins. Yours was tall and tilted. We marveled it did not fall, as clearly, it was lacking glue. You said crash, crash, it finally did, during nap time, a cacophony of clacks. You howled -- she hushhhed, but I saw her smile before the scowl returned. Mine was a fortress without style buttressed by copious globs of goo, fossilized dust motes and amber hairs. Impregnable where it stood; it stood on through parents’ night, then long after it should, on a mantel, a gift for Mom. Now, we stand on opposite mesas -- along north and south facing strands; each combing the constructs of the other. You, again, with only debris left of your home: walls erected to self-destruct, often do. We never did agree on rungs of risk. Me, with blueprints and bills of materials, all set to begin. Work to fill days, to drop me into sleep at night. The wind erases all, even footprints to my door. It embraces the trees, turns them into shutters. I am surrounded by full-to-the-brim moats. Honestly, I thought you could swim. [This message has been edited by Corinne (03-20-2004 07:56 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are an amazing, thoughtful poet and methinks your forte' is people. I loved this. The symbolism is delightful, and your talent for letting the reader conclude the thoughts proposed makes you the better writer.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne Really well done, the differences so plain, and a cutting edge to the end. So real. Enjoyed your work, as always! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Serenity blaze -- oh you, you made my day with those wonderful, encouraging words. Thank you! Thank you, sweet Martie. About a friend that I've bailed out more times than I can say. I really wouldn't let him drown, just thought it would be a fun/evil little twist from my twisted little mind! hahaha! Corinne |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dang, girl...you've been doing your research. Who cares if we see the same word in one day? I think we both used the one word judiciously...don't you? Now, keep on with those thoughts. I'm waiting in line, y'know. And I don't like waiting too long...just long enough for my first signed copy!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Corinne -- Brilliant writing -- my type of poem, for sure! ..........jo |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Wow, sent chills through me, this is great!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
back up to the top--this is the best I've read...well, since you posted last. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..Corinne./\..i thouroughly enjoyed your poem; thanks.. ../\..Spiros --------------calm--------- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
loved this read |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I just know I'm going to love your work when I see your name up on these boards. This is absolutely marvellous Corinne.. all your work is I'm keeping it. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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