Open Poetry #31 |
Why, in the knowing? |
Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"What is it we're made of, made of?" as if in rhyme we ask when smiles appear to crumble beneath weighted gain of loss. Why do we skulk in knowing that boon can stem from bad? Instead we linger salt mist sky aback the albatross. What are we made of, made of? In all precission, stardust. Would Stardust ride the albatross? [This message has been edited by Sadelite (03-19-2004 08:14 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Would stardust ride the albatross? ----------------------- absolutely!!!! cool poem... quite unique!! well done sadelite Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Sadie...you are precious |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
I am quite certain stardust loves to float upon all wings lifted with Heavens breath Albatross, Pigeon, Dragonfly any all Wings that rise Stardust Upwards all to always nicely done "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
MMMMMMMM..interesting writing...thought provking.... Thank you Sadie.... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Janet, Thanks for the cool! I appreciate your response. Sadie Passing Shadows, Ditto to you! Sadie Eternity, I think we're on different pages. But that's ok because poetry is open to interpretation. I liked yours. You did cause me to make an edit though. (I then personified Stardust). Thanks for getting me to think. I'm trying to describe where I think we first varied in interpretation. Perhaps here. "Instead we linger salt mist sky aback the albatross." First of all, I'm too impatient to linger about some things, especially in salt mist. That's muggy and uncomfortable, and it yucks up my hair! Secondly, I'm too stubborn to ride; too independent-don't need a bird to carry me-ought to be able to go on my own. Then why do I feel I need others at times when I know from experience that I should just close the door taking the blessings I've gained? Ok. That pretty well describes the first part. The second part is up to your interp. I know mine! Smiles sent. Thanks for taking time to comment and read. Sadie Goldenrose, Yeah, I agree. Thought provoking. I still remember reading a poem of yours from a couple of weeks ago. I really identified with the circumstances and liked how you described. It was very thought provoking, too. Perhaps this would make a chapter 2 for the poem I'm referring. Take care. Sadie |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Especially liked the last line, and the many thoughts surrounding your poem. Much enjoyed Sadie~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
BluesSerenade, I'm glad you enjoyed the thinking behind this. It was kind of you to comment. Thank you. Sadelite |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
In all precision, stardust ... you mean not the glittering one we see flashing in the night sky ... You show your knowing in your question. Boon can stem from bad .. Your deep ponderings are stirring. Your mind holds stardust .... the glittering one. Love, Margherita |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very unique write..very much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Margherita, And you're in the knowing, too, my poetic friend. I'm glad you commented about "Why do we skulk from knowing boon can come from bad?" Two of those words were not in my vocabulary until I met with the thesaurus when I wrote it. I wondered if they worked or would be understood. Thanks for your sweet response. Sadelite Enchantress, I'm so glad you dropped by an found something unique and enjoyable. Have a great weekend. Sadelite |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sadie... You stir so many thoughts with your pen... How I do enjoy the vision through your eyes. TD |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This Diamond, And I enjoy the vision through yours... Thank you so much. Sadie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
C., you just keek getting better and better. Really enjoyed the poem and the comments above. .....jo |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, Thanks for your positive comments. Do you remember Daddy teasing us with the poem about what are little girls made of? Sugar and spice and everything nice. That's what little girls are made of, made of. (I always wanted to be made of strings and snails and puppy dog tails-it sounded more adventurous!) We were so fortunate to have had him instill the love of sound and questioning in us. And Mom, too. Incredible woman. Thanks for commenting, Jo. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) As always your poetry is filled with such grace and wonderful thought, sweet friend, I think any act of faith can weather the albatross, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Noah, You're much too kind in your flattery. As I read your words, I wondered whatconstitute acts of faith. If you read this,I'd being interested to know by post or e-mail. Thank you, Sadie |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow, this one really makes me think... kind of (in my interpretation anyway) point out the irony of so much of what we do as humans. Wanting good but never accepting it like we should... I guess humans tend to cling to darkness, it's easier to understand. Anyway, I love this! Thanks for the great read. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Alyssa, your interpretation was exactly what I meant. Do you read my mind? I don't know if darkness is easier for me to understand or not-I'm wondering if we strive to keep darkness as to keep ourselves in check, or in balance. I have no understanding why we don't accept goodness and move on, leaving the darkness behind. I enjoyed your insightful comment. I hope all is going well. Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts. They always mean a lot me me. Have you posted lately? I don't recall seeing your name. ~Cathy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I missed this on the first go around... so glad it popped back up... JM's comments mirror my own... and I enjoyed the comments, as well! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Sunshine, Thanks for your thoughts and comments-they help me think beyond my perspective. I can hardly believe how blessed I am to have this internet connection with so many wonderful people with whom to share feedback. It has been a God send to me. Sadie |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"when smiles appear to crumble beneath weighted gain of loss." ~ What a memorable line this is! I enjoy your writing very much. You have depth, insight, and a wonderfully creative mind! Love & Light, EA |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Thank you, Vandana. I enjoy your work and appreciate all the work that goes into it. The love you express is always refreshing. Sadelite Earth Angel, I've gathered the same thoughts about your abilities. I enjoy your work and creative thoughts as well. Yours always come in living color. Thank you for your flattering comments. (Sometimes, I wish I could lose some depth-I have "just enough" to realize I understand very little. Sadelite |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Sadie - I enjoy thinking about things and you did that with this - I enjoyed it a lot - Paul |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Paul, I've enjoyed enough of your posts to know that. You are a fine writer. Thank you for stopping by again. I can hardly find time to make my rounds but am eager to stop by and catch up on my reading. It seems that is all I have done in the last three days and am nowhere near it. I read and think too slowly. Sadie |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Thank you everyone. I so appreciate your thoughts. Sadie |
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