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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
The ocean swells and subsides oblivious to the change in the sky lost in his darkest depths opens not his downcast eyes so vast, all shores are his never ending, just always is Foaming in anger at everything only him constrained, he thinks rage against the land sun-dried rising to heaven while he sinks in black thoughts again and again darkness so complete in the end Shakes his fist at the sky his mightiest of foes free to move wither at will upward how high no one knows to toss him about in restless mood he lingers in eternal darkened brood Ships appear on the horizon valiant tamers here they come all mistaken in their pride they are lost, each and every one and not a trace survives as he swells and subsides The sun and moon keep away lost in their own pursuits as the land revels in its strength and holds the ocean mute he yearns to join in their play to turn back to another day His wrath makes him blind to the sky as she brims with tears sad for the love he doesn't feel and her voice he no longer hears the ocean swells and subsides oblivious to the rain as she cries |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Hi PK, Darkness is just writing about the unknown. It involves opening the mind to whatever. You just have to know the difference. If you haven't already, go to " saltydreamspoetry@ezboardcom ".This site and forum are excellent. But if you want a better response for your type of writing, try salty dreams/darkside. Nice write. wayne |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very nice!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Your works inspire PK... Into sudden vapor All visions, all tears Scarred incisions, mighty fears Into sudden vapor Cloud burst, upon the fields Feeding seas, fearing yields Filling...filling...flood Into shades of harmony Few poems have this impact on me. Well done. TD |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The sun and moon keep away lost in their own pursuits as the land revels in its strength and holds the ocean mute he yearns to join in their play to turn back to another day His wrath makes him blind to the sky as she brims with tears sad for the love he doesn't feel and her voice he no longer hears the ocean swells and subsides oblivious to the rain as she cries =================================== your dark brooding writes have always been some of my faves... the imagery, vocabulary and phrasing in this is excellent. The sun and moon keep away lost in their own pursuits as the land revels in its strength and holds the ocean mute those lines and images are poetic gold. another PK keeper. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
I agree this is a dark and forboding poem; yet it touches at the deepest level. I truly enjoyed his piece. Excellent writing, PKreturns. |
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