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PKreturns
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since 2003-07-21
Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2004-03-17 12:32 PM


The ocean swells and subsides
oblivious to the change in the sky
lost in his darkest depths
opens not his downcast eyes
so vast, all shores are his
never ending, just always is

Foaming in anger at everything
only him constrained, he thinks
rage against the land sun-dried
rising to heaven while he sinks
in black thoughts again and again
darkness so complete in the end

Shakes his fist at the sky
his mightiest of foes
free to move wither at will
upward how high no one knows
to toss him about in restless mood
he lingers in eternal darkened brood

Ships appear on the horizon
valiant tamers here they come
all mistaken in their pride
they are lost, each and every one
and not a trace survives
as he swells and subsides

The sun and moon keep away
lost in their own pursuits
as the land revels in its strength
and holds the ocean mute
he yearns to join in their play
to turn back to another day

His wrath makes him blind
to the sky as she brims with tears
sad for the love he doesn't feel
and her voice he no longer hears
the ocean swells and subsides
oblivious to the rain as she cries


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mysticpoe
Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

1 posted 2004-03-17 01:15 PM


Hi PK, Darkness is just writing about the unknown. It involves opening the mind to whatever. You just have to know the difference. If you haven't already, go to " saltydreamspoetry@ezboardcom ".This site and forum are excellent. But if you want a better response for your type of writing, try salty dreams/darkside. Nice write.

wayne

Grover
Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
2 posted 2004-03-17 02:09 PM


Very nice!
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
3 posted 2004-03-17 02:36 PM


Your works inspire PK...

Into sudden vapor
All visions, all tears
Scarred incisions, mighty fears
Into sudden vapor

Cloud burst, upon the fields
Feeding seas, fearing yields
Filling...filling...flood
Into shades of harmony

Few poems have this impact on me.
Well done. TD


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2004-03-17 02:42 PM


The sun and moon keep away
lost in their own pursuits
as the land revels in its strength
and holds the ocean mute
he yearns to join in their play
to turn back to another day

His wrath makes him blind
to the sky as she brims with tears
sad for the love he doesn't feel
and her voice he no longer hears
the ocean swells and subsides
oblivious to the rain as she cries

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your dark brooding writes have always been some of my faves...
the imagery, vocabulary and phrasing in this is excellent.


The sun and moon keep away
lost in their own pursuits
as the land revels in its strength
and holds the ocean mute



those lines and images are poetic gold.
another PK keeper.  

Ivy Rose
Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300
MA, USA
5 posted 2004-03-17 11:17 PM


I agree this is a dark and forboding poem; yet it touches at the deepest level. I truly enjoyed his piece. Excellent writing, PKreturns.
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