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Open Poetry #31

Have I Crossed Your Mind

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

0 posted 2004-03-16 10:46 PM

Have I Crossed Your Mind

Wondering will you return
Have you completely gone
My mind seeking answers
Whilst my heart lingers on

Wondering if words reach
With thoughts I expressed
Have I crossed your mind
Or do you think of me less

Wondering can you sense
My heart feelings in rhyme
Your silence never told me
If I am just wasting my time

Wondering is where I'm at
Why someone loses touch
Heartache is the reminder
I was missing you so much

Hope©2004

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2004-03-17 01:14 AM

This is very nicely done because it says so much with so few words.

These two lines are excellent..
"Your silence never told me
If I am just wasting my time"

Then these two lines as a follow up.
"Heartache is the reminder
I was missing you so much"

A very concise but well written work.

Eric

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-03-17 03:00 AM

I know

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

3 posted 2004-03-18 10:39 AM

So many times in life this has happened.With the passage of time we wonder do we cross their mind or are we just a memory lost in time.
See Ya
Bon-Bon