Truth Speaks with Flagrant Disregard for Illusion

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Open Poetry #31

Truth Speaks with Flagrant Disregard for Illusion

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2004-03-16 10:48 AM

Daylight breaks
With yet another
Disappointment
Yielding a truth
That must be faced
Alone

A tearless face
Watches out the window
As cloak of night
Recedes
Hoping the answer
Will be given
On the wings of a new day

Giving reason
To trust
Lips that caressed
In deceit
Hiding a truth
Knowing
To tell would bring death
to what is

Grover
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since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

1 posted 2004-03-16 11:00 AM

Well written, smooth flowing. Enjoyed much!

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

2 posted 2004-03-16 11:06 AM

i enjoyed this

and the title rocks!!

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

3 posted 2004-03-16 11:55 AM

"To trust
Lips that caressed
In deceit
Hiding a truth
Knowing
To tell would bring death
to what is"

I may have taken this differently than your intention but sometimes that is the power of poetry: to take the mind in its own direction.

Thank you, you put me back in touch with something inside me that I can not afford to forget.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2004-03-16 01:01 PM

Sometimes illusion likes to win the game, doesn't it? An intense write, Susan, a well written heartbeat.

PassionatelyRomantic
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since 2004-01-24

Posts 190

5 posted 2004-03-16 02:11 PM

flowed like a river great write Can't wait to sail down another!

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

6 posted 2004-03-16 02:39 PM

Yes - excellent

Dave

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

7 posted 2004-03-16 02:42 PM

I like the way you made this seem like a whisper. Maybe it was just the way I read it. I guess that's one of the many great things about poetry.

I loved it!!

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

8 posted 2004-03-17 08:03 AM

Susan,

this one had me thinking... I could imagine at least a couple of meanings... intriguing, indeed and well written. Thanks for sharing!

"You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark."

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

9 posted 2004-03-17 08:31 AM

Thank you everyone!

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

PKreturns
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since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

10 posted 2004-03-17 11:58 AM

I liked the ending...very cool.

Edder
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since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

11 posted 2004-03-17 12:32 PM

there's always hope...

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