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Seeing You
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Seeing You |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Seeing You I saw you. There on a mug in the pottery shop, your face and not your face; an hour later when a light turned you stepped off the far curb. We met at the midline and it wasn’t you but your glance flicked to me and my heart stopped for long seconds, walking. I saw your face... your face, not you, but somehow you, your eyes, hair there in the next car, you weren’t there yet I saw, and -- how can I see you so, everywhere I go everywhere I look, your face always there, just coming into sight, your shape, your walk, your face.... Can it be because I know everywhere she goes, everywhere she looks, she sees you too? |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful! Love projects the image of the beloved everywhere ... Love, Margherita  |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Love has many faces-- you describe them very well! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Seeing you ~ seeing me ~ seeing each other... I too, have experienced this. This was so beautiful...  Warm hugs, EA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Jamie Smiling at you and a hug!  |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I'm laughin' and cryin' at the same time -- every single person who has read that poem missed that it's really about the very opposite of what it seems to be...my last three lines stand it on its head, and everybody read right past 'em. But the laugh's on me, because if everyone misreads, that means it's the poet's fault for not being clear enough! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shadows of mysterious, wind their way through a heart; one would think one's serious, but 'twas a dream in start... ~*~ Smiling at this... oh creature of the hall of mirrors... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Here's to seeing you too and this is a fine example Eric |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in awe |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
James, I thought this was about missing someone so much you see them everywhere, and then your last stanza said, everywhere she goes she sees you too. Now there's too much this could be. Is 'she' your new love who is jealous of the old love? Is 'she' maybe your daughter missing a mother who is gone? 'she' could even be a wife, seeing the 'other woman' who may no longer be around but is still spoiling her life. You opened it up and I don't know what to think. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I liked this very much. I know where you're coming from. Beautifully expressed. Sadelite |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When I first read this, I feared I was misreading... for I didn't get a case of warm fuzzies from the read at all... more the chill of hearing The Twilight Zone's theme... *S* There is love there, yes... but there's also fear and maybe regret... The depth you've written is astounding! *S* Every read gives me a different story... and each one is fascinating... Excellent work! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sounds like you've got a problem. Hope it all works out. Actually, I felt the love for this person you see everywhere even though it sounds forbidden or a memory, whatever the case. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i too see the faces of the past a heart once filled with the pain a spirit with broken wings a soul that couldnt see forgiveness has given light to my soul my spirit flies free my heart still fills some pain but no longer unwanted memories thanks for sharing and bringing up feelings that i know now i feel at peace with |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
James, I'm glad this came to the top again. I would guess that you are not going through this alone, but have someone who empathesizes dearly on the other side. Your poem was beautifully told. I feel your words. Take care. Sadie |
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sunshinemc Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 27 |
I enjoyed this very much, it was a great poem and an awesome ending. great job! |
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