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jellybeans
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0 posted 2004-03-15 02:29 PM


pricked

love sans thorns, is it
as sweet, pray tell me is the rose
naked as beautiful as this
long stemmed stance
so gracefully planted
before me?
one
petal
at a
time
her
love
letter
to
him
unfolds
passion’s
need
propels
and
tightens
his
grasp
the
bleeding
starts
with
first
prick



this was for a contest on another board, but wanted to share.....I write so little that when I do I better post

© Copyright 2004 jellybeans - All Rights Reserved
Toerag
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1 posted 2004-03-15 03:16 PM


Yanno....if you'd just come down here an spend one single night with me...you'd be Toeragged and pricked too!!!...Oh well, I can dream yanno?
Enchantress
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2 posted 2004-03-15 04:17 PM


Wonderful write and I love the presentation.
Hugs~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

         ~  Kahlil Gibran

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2004-03-15 04:56 PM


lovely...

hus
M

DavePage
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4 posted 2004-03-15 05:10 PM


One of the things about here is the quality of the words

Dave

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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
5 posted 2004-03-15 06:42 PM


very pretty
Sunshine
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6 posted 2004-03-15 06:49 PM



Yes, please...
share, all the time...
even when the petals fall...

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7 posted 2004-03-22 09:55 AM


This is lovely, my friend... your talents continue to multiply! *S*

But love without thorns/bleeding/pain? *S* Only in dreams... *S*

jellybeans
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8 posted 2004-03-22 03:21 PM


thank you all, didn't realize I hadn't been back to give my thanks

and suthern, sigh...guess we can dream...if only....
love  you lady

SimplyGold
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9 posted 2004-03-27 07:41 PM


This is very lovely.

(Read Toerags reply. A word of advice "watch out for the prick"

RobertB
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10 posted 2004-03-28 02:48 PM


Very cool, jb


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11 posted 2004-03-28 05:47 PM


JellyGal~
For you to share something sooooo lovely with us is our delight~
Anytime dearest poetess ... anytime~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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