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Vaguely Alone
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Vaguely Alone (A Triolet) It's in the vague where I'll reside for fear of letting friendship in. Without the words I can't confide the feelings hiding deep inside. I'm left choking on swallowed pride and the angst is begining to win. It's in the vague where I'll reside for fear of letting friendship in. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
For a poem this sharp, I wonder where the vague came from Yes I like it Dave |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I know what you mean, Dawn..I know what you mean... M |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
It's in the vague where I'll reside for fear of letting friendship in... I understand this clearly... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh yes, how we do understand.....perfectly put |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
this is perfect poetry. and by that i don't mean format...(though it is well done)... i mean, how it touches the senses and latches on to something inside of me. snow |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
but...I'm your friend...ya quit writing me but I still love ya?... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Dave: thank you  (the vague actually comes from the other stuff i write, seems this one holds a bit of irony in that regard)Maureen: PK: im glad you came and read, thank you Jellybeans: thank you, im so happy to see you here Dixie: the hug is well needed! thank you Snow: its always a pleasure to have you come and comment, thank you so much. Toe: oh goodness! i havent forgoten you, i just knew you were busy..i didnt want to be a bother! thank you buddy, for being there for me. |
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WildPoet Member
since 2003-11-10
Posts 205California |
I really liked the style. WildPoet  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear muted, perfectly shaped and carrying a message to ponder over …. Why are we so afraid? We fear disappointment, but the very fear could prove us right, so we better trust. Your smile tells me that you can’t be lonely! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Dawn open your heart...you have the love within you...share it with the world...great poem..enjoyed reading... Thank you... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"It's in the vague where I'll reside for fear of letting friendship in." ~ As a naval serviceman for the past 22+ years, I can completely relate to this poem. I have moved so many times that the vagueness is now imbedded into my being. Well written! "You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark." |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
It's in the vague where I'll reside for fear of letting friendship in. Please come out .... there's a whole big world of wonderful people waiting to meet you. Well written ... Hugs, Marti |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
friendship , a strong subject to write about..the friends we make, the friens we lose, the friends who pass on, the friends who save your life when you least expect it, the world wouldnt go around if there were no friends , lets all be friends, for who knows what will happen in the end ....life is too short to be picky lol ...Hugs ....... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you are among many.... ~~**~~ |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
This touches home. I ride in the same boat of Vaguely Alone. Bon-Bon  |
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PassionatelyRomantic Member
since 2004-01-24
Posts 190 |
perfectly done i love this write! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I understand completely. I am a coward when it comes to friends. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Expressed very well, I can relate. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
was such a lovely suprise to wake up to all these wonderful replies, you all are sweeties |
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