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my rose reds
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my rose reds |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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she had yearned for my rose reds rounds a golden circle eye grabbing at them like a child and indeed she was... I allowed them just a slip circle blue eternity there beware of rosy round sing-song singing ridicule laughter lifting feet hopscotch fingers pointing easing pain just to be part of the game just a moment's censure gain just the same it's all the same peewee pees upon himself mother dangling the sheets yellow with the shame of shout Alfred never gave a damn-- he'd stuff his fat face filled with food, willingness to be fat fool-- he played the part they wrote. Andromeda that was her name her mother must have known the game and gave her life free from the shame of little kids who laughed too loud at accusationed lunacy. Lust of stuff to be enough fitting in the rhythm's bluff Andromeda tied to the cliff waiting for a titan's kiss exchange of virginity-- salt regret and salt of sea nothing nothing's quite enough as she gagged upon the tide. Children are the clean swept shore as shells are houses of the lie foaming shave as waves seek youth re-arranging honest sighs to pieces fitting perfectly as she yearned for my rose reds as she yearned a hastened fate rounds a golden circle eye... wishing on a back-stiff cliff that she were already dead. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, That's quite a pinata, enjoyed.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Andromeda that was her name her mother must have known the game and gave her life free from the shame of little kids who laughed too loud at accusationed lunacy. Lust of stuff to be enough fitting in the rhythm's bluff Andromeda tied to the cliff waiting for a titan's kiss exchange of virginity-- salt regret and salt of sea nothing nothing's quite enough as she gagged upon the tide. Children are the clean swept shore as shells are houses of the lie foaming shave as waves seek youth re-arranging honest sighs to pieces fitting perfectly ============================== You blow me away with ALL that you observe then absorb and turn into poetry.... and this ....... Children are the clean swept shore as shells are houses of the lie do ya know how profound and cool that is... glad you gave us this rose back  I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons, and the sacred simplicity of you at my side. Vienna Teng |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is deep...and for some reason I don't know what to say right now |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I found it complex almost masses of ideas and poems linked into one It was almost as if you didn't want someone to read it yet placed gems to attract Quality that almost wants to defeat itself Dave |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I've always loved how you say so many things that intrigue me even when I don't understand what you're talking about..... I try though I really do. I see my poet pet Janet knows what you're talking about. Like Jeff Foxworthy says, "you women think us men are complicated because you're complicated......but....the truth of the matter is, we're not complicated at all. All we want is a beer and to see something naked!" Love your stuff... Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
serenity - your words cause my brain and heart to get tangled together and to share images and thoughts and feelings - this is a great poem - Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen You color with all the crayons at the same time!!  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
o the places you go...........where few dare |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I feel as if I had fallen into a mix of children's rhymes and Suess's time... but I'll bet that's what you wanted all along  It's so good to call you... friend. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Karen~Yer so talented...you amaze me!! Hugs~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Children are the clean swept shore as shells are houses of the lie foaming shave as waves seek youth re-arranging honest sighs to pieces fitting perfectly" Very intriguing poem and I am putting in my library to study -- yes, good, very good! .......jo |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Karen~ this is so deeply written and rich with much emotion.... almost a need to be on the porch to hear it either read aloud, or spoken....visual images! stunning ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen?... just...wow... You never cease to amaze me...truly... This?... "laughter lifting feet hopscotch fingers pointing easing pain just to be part of the game just a moment's censure gain just the same it's all the same peewee pees upon himself mother dangling the sheets yellow with the shame of shout Alfred never gave a damn-- he'd stuff his fat face filled with food, willingness to be fat fool-- he played the part they wrote." You already know... And this?... "Children are the clean swept shore as shells are houses of the lie foaming shave as waves seek youth re-arranging honest sighs to pieces fitting perfectly" I don't have the words...but just know that this one touched... deeply... Love you, my sister... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you all for reading. I'd deleted this once because I realized it wasn't going to make much sense to anyone but me--it's a mishmash of childhood memory and adult rationalizations. I pulled it because I thought it unfair to expect anyone to understand when it's all my own subconcious language, but then? a couple of you eagle-eyed poets noticed that I'd deleted it, so I put it back for them. (sheesh, Jan and vicky? you guys are FAST) Thanks for allowing me to play with m'self in public. *chuckle* Love to all. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
You are always awesome to read. This is yet another reminder. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Children are the clean swept shore" I REALLY like that line!!!!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
FMD Karen...nodding my head...you're incredible. I wish I could spend at least one day with you. sigh... M Oh and keeping this. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you--and a bit of an explanation "by request". I own a pair of red, round sunglasses and last week a friend's daughter wanted them, and shame on me I couldn't part with them. (I figured I needed 'em more than she did.) But we took turns looking at the world through them, and the conversation we had while doing that inspired this poem. So that one was for "Zoe." The explanation is for Chrislane. Love to all. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yes, oh yes.....I see...I DO see! Thankyou witchyone. Hugs, Chrislane Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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