Open Poetry #31 |
morning asked... |
Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
The morning asked The sunshine basked Sleepy eyes blinked The echoes winked The sounds were soft Fingers were crossed Time chattered aimlessly Love wandered helplessly Sighs were felt but never heard Time worried the deeper self Pushing something important to the shelf Serene breezes wafted full Momentous feelings felt the pull Life pulls and pushes us Sometimes we are forced to board the bus But into night our souls do wander Hoping that we don’t squander Loves we have that can be near Loves that may cause us fear So as the night drew into day I hoped that morning would be on its way But then that question posed to us all The morning asked… |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Lots of cool rhymes! Grover. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love the rhyme scheme here Paul! Now this one made me smile...much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very nice! I liked the long and short lines in this. ~sky Hold on, if you feel like letting go |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Paul Each morning has it's list of questions...I liked yours! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Goodknight, I enjoyed this thoroughly. Great write! It made me smile. Sadelite |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Paul, I especially enjoyed this poem of yours -- there's a lot of wisdom in what you've presented! .......jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
delightful! |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Paul..another wonderful write, I really enjoyed the rhymic tone of this one. I'm really beginning to enjoy your poems with each new one I read. Well done!! ^*Kimberley*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I felt the rhythm of the to and fro ~ and ebb and flow ~ of life! Have a happy day! EA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lots of great rhymes and I love the open end of this piece. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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