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Open Poetry #31

dodoitsu #8

Snow

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since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2004-01-28 02:37 AM

dodoitsu #8

liquid; words against your tongue
drunk on the ones lingering
she licks her lips to taste truth
fallen; he spells love

©snow'03

"...why does my skeleton pursue me
if my soul has fallen away?"
~p.neruda

wordwizard
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since 2003-09-08

Posts 483
on the way to next world

1 posted 2004-01-28 02:43 AM

This sound like the someone is waiting for the eternal words of love...and the approach is evocative and a 'passionate' statement is being made...

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

2 posted 2004-01-28 02:44 AM

Egad! This is a great piece. Love it! Wish I had written this. Dang good. Wonderful! Keep it up.

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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-01-28 03:39 AM

short, sweet, and awesome!

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2004-01-28 07:31 PM

loverly...absolutely loverly...thanks for sharing

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2004-01-29 05:49 PM

Enjoyed...James

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