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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-03-08 03:07 PM



Swords to lacerate my heart
Bleeding
To finality
In mock plays
of Death

Swords to tie my heart
In a circle of steel
Enshined upon my neck
Everything free
But me

Am I the attacker or defender
With words to live with both of you
Or to have no life
As you attack through me
For your desires

Encircling me with steel
That cuts the soul
And grants your desires

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Grover
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1 posted 2004-03-08 03:30 PM


Very good! "Cutting imagery!" Grover.
DavePage
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2 posted 2004-03-08 03:55 PM


Grover

I'm not sure whether I cut this too short.

Circle of Steel kept going through my mind on this one but the emotions with a woman can often be sharper than anything yet more subtle than the finest blade.

Dave

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