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Silver Breath |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Silver Breath this morning two inches from the ground rolls mimosa breath a silver fog that has the imagination to be dew just not the courage feathery leaved winged dreams skipping along on grass tips gently floating like warmth that tickles the back of your neck |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very gentle and beautiful write Helen.... Thank you... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lovely!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO! one of your best! loved the imagery, the softness of this |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you are so awesome at these descriptions |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
True vision. Excellent! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Helen!! Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I really LOVE this one.....but I (personally) would have liked to read it with more words per line. I think it would have been more powerful to me. I know it's hard to decide where to end a line sometimes. Robert Silver Breath this morning two inches from the ground rolls mimosa breath a silver fog that has the imagination to be dew just not the courage..... feathery leaved winged dreams skipping along on grass tips gently floating like warmth that tickles the back of your neck. Now I REALLY LOVE this poem!! I hope the poetic license has not overstepped the bounds. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
not at all ty all |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Lovely poem. Deb |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
very powerfull Dave |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
ahhhh sweetness ..... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Exceptionally good! Grover. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
beautiful |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"a silver fog that has the imagination to be dew just not the courage" Speaking of imagination . . . and I know where the courage is and the talent e |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such an expressive image...almost visonesque |
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