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across a page of deliberation |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I realise that you are far away now no, not in distance (is a small world this) but in the space between us an ever-increasing divide tending towards infinity another divide by zero error looms you hardly even hint a smile when our eyes meet almost as if you know that even a twitch of your lips and a small sparkle in your eyes would give me an exponential growth of satisfaction about the times that used to be and the tides that we used to swim hence perhaps that another curtain takes its due place between the silhouettes of our memories very deliberately I wish life was simple as a game of chess at least I could have traced back to figure out my weaker moves amongst surely many weak ones and could have arrived at a few of those decision gates where logic was overtaken by emotions like some unexplainable love for handmade looms and stitches on Belgian lace though knowing well that machines are designed to be more perfect in their finishing quality yet life remains lacking it is imperfect like love verily deliberate * ! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
May I just say...WOW!!! This is another amazing write from you today Sudhir! Very much enjoyed... I found I was holding my breath all the way through... and never wanting it to end. Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I thank you profusely, my friend... regards sudhir |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Another awesome piece of writing! Geesh...if I could only write like this! hugs, Chris |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fills the page perfectly...one of my favorites...James |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
WOW!!!...Life with all its imperfections still gives us the ability to reach above ourselves and leave a little magic in our path such as these words do as they move across the page... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i'll keep a ditto on the "WOW"!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"it is imperfect like love verily deliberate * !" Great write, Sudhir! |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
enjoyed this a lot, espically the part where you compared life to a game of chess "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Exceptional! "another curtain takes its due place between the silhouettes of our memories" Very, very good work! Grover. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
*Chuckling* We both know that logic has no place in this. And you've stated that here quite nicely... Very well done, m'friend |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is SO good...and these two stanza are well nigh perfection "I wish life was simple as a game of chess at least I could have traced back to figure out my weaker moves amongst surely many weak ones and could have arrived at a few of those decision gates where logic was overtaken by emotions like some unexplainable love for handmade looms and stitches on Belgian lace though knowing well that machines are designed to be more perfect in their finishing quality" |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Powerful and beautiful!!! And like it was said above, I kept my breath while reading too. You've such a talent of puting the right words together Sudhir. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I am not sure that chess is simple  awesome piece here Sudhir |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Many many thanks, dear friends for your thoughts of appreciation regards sudhir |
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