Open Poetry #31 |
Tacit Rejoinders (Duet with Gentle Spirit) |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tacit Rejoinder Alone, among many, as silent thoughts Of what to do, turn a corner or Stand still, rambling, rumbling, rubbing Irritants, wanting, needing, to be pearls but still Only sand, tumbling within... To whom does one turn? Faceless, untouchable, spiritual quests Exception by key that one may Interchange exchanges of subliminal views, We reach sans hesitancy into the unknown.... For there is to be found, somewhere Out there, where A sense for any vibration plucked From silent, tonal plea in keys of lee.... As ivories tinkle through one’s mind Searching for more, In seek of find. Hear the music…seek the rhyme… Count heartbeats in three and quartered time A tune played, a melody In gentle caress Crescendos building, sweet rise and fall Tones of solemn understanding Sung in duet of harmonies, Universal notes Timeless pleas A song written... Can you hear me? Voices seek timeless knowing Carried through in endless tombs Alone among the many, true But nurtured more since time in womb Across the lands, vast miles traveled Held in journeys of thought Pearls of wisdom Cast before all, as Precious time’s net has caught For, these are the sweetest of Treasures found Through searing pain and strife, So it shall be sung, As voices reach beyond the shadows, Joining this chorus called life. ~*~ Donna, thank you so much for blending your voice with mine. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
well-blended duet...you two work together well...virtually seamless |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Brava!! Wonderful duet you two!! hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"For, these are the sweetest of Treasures found Through searing pain and strife" Wow...so many good lines/stanza's to pick from... This was outstanding! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
This Demands tuning HeartStrings Carressing Balance Turning each For HarmonyMatchingMelody Must LiftUntoPerfection Doubling Six and Eight TrueTime That EverySingleNote GlowsLifeShine Ladies This IS ELEGANCE and SO MUCH MORE I bow to your combined prowess and SO MUCH MORE "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I very much enjoyed this. You two work very well together. Thanks for sharing! Sadie |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A beautiful blending of voices!! Please du-et again soon. Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Hear the music…seek the rhyme… Count heartbeats in three and quartered time A tune played, a melody In gentle caress" how beautiful! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Have you considered a career in "teaching others to see images?" I'm only slightly joshing, as there is a fine line of thought within your writing. KJ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
two of my favorite artists...together yes |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice duet |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wonderfully done!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all. Donna has a unique voice, and gives rise to unexpected thoughts. If you ever have a chance to duet with her, I encourage you all, to do so. She IS a presence! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
It's always a pleasure to write with this lady; gently, she encourages me to do better until I've reached my goal and I've done my best. Blended with hers my words finally come to rest, in the magical music of two a sharing of muses brings words so true; a lifting of voices in melody Thanks so much, my dear friend Karilea!! Thank you all so very much for your wonderful comments and I can't stress enough that if you ever have writers block she can definitely get the creative muses back in gear and help stretch your mind. It is a treat! Karilea, thank you for the tender tugging and for allowing me to reach further! Hugs It's better than I could have planned.. it's made me who I am... {Trace Adkins} |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Wherein could words Possibly be found offering an arm worthy RoseScented Reality BentPassages Offered melody sung so true But it is an inspiration to keep trying to match the combination of elegance and raw truth contained herein "People, people if you miss this one, regrets will nibble thy muse evermore- evermore" "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
RoseScented Reality BentPassages Chuckling...I really liked that line! Thank you Kendell, your words left a bright spot in my day as I am sure it also did in Karilea's. Ah but I am forgetting, she is the SUN is she not? *s* Thanks again everyone! |
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