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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Cut off like a scrap of red leather torn between pillows and seams my legs hung over in place of my head don't touch me there beneath blankets thrown over with careless abandon replaced with a thin sheet sliding off the edge of desire and a tear I don't want to shed pooling my efforts to keep cool defying any substance to soak up. ~*~ |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh, i felt pain from this, a pain very familiar....  i hope you are well  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, this one aches right off the page Bluesy |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
a well written verse with all the earmarks of the inspiration for a good blues tune...can almost hear the soulful tones playing in my mind |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy, great metaphors -- and I have known that feeling, too. Take care, sweet lady. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
There's one thing that does dry it, and you know what that is. Love does it, only that. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I like how you placed "don't" all on it's on...shows strength. You go girl. Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
awwww pretty lady this does indeed ache...huggggs from MN.... ~~**~~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, what Maree said! |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Ouch ... cut off, excellently expressed Blusy , boy of boy I have felt like this Hope |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This one hurts to read... but it's powerful enough to keep the eyes from shying away. *S* Excellent write! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for all your nice replies everyone. I guess you could say, I lost my cool there for a minute. But today is another day, and it's beautiful out. Hugs all around!! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Heartrending pain fills these words...I am glad today is beautiful for you....Your writing is very powerfull... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
All to real! Grover. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your momentaneous mood is so powerfully expressed here. It hurts like an open wound. Love, Margherita |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Strong spirit in the quill...much like the author. Hugs Bluesy. TD |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I feel this one, my friend...the hurt of it and the stength!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I find strength here |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a dark mood for sure... hope it is going better today M |
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