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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I was told that even angels couldn't fly with clipped wings. But I just had to try. Was going to prove you wrong but i was always better at mistakes than promises. Falling is easier when you close your eyes. Too bad blind doesn't feel any better than regret. You know the world looks a whole lot bigger than i remembered... and the air feels colder at the backs of unsurmountable mountains. Yet I'm left to jumping valleys hoping to lose my footing and let all just swallow me whole. To be consumed in something beautiful for a least one last breath. Who cares for broken sunbeams, they fade anyway. Something else easily replaced by watercolours. Waking is a gentler way to disappear, but i wont concede to be a daydream. I'm just going to plunge into something deeper than numb. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great imagery and thoughts. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm just going to plunge into something deeper than numb. I like this... and I think I'll do the same  enjoyed. Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
muted, this was not one bit muted. Heavy duty! This seemed to flow so simply without an effort, but it has such incredible depth. Much enjoyed. ~Sadelite~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Hey, there's more to flight than just wings, so believe you can fly and there you know you've gone beyond numb, which is just the second wind comfort again! (big angel hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is true art, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
WOW!! You've been creatively busy today...another beauty, and when you dive into the abyss, I wonder what will evolve? Paul |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Waking is a gentler way to disappear, but i wont concede to be a daydream Love that!! I'll get back to you on this! Ooooooooooo, it's just so....so pretty!!! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
To be consumed in something beautiful for a least one last breath'' much peace in this....lovely you! I lie awake at night |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Wonderful talent...the layers of this were captivating. TD |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Wonderful poem. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
but i was always better at mistakes than promises. **************************** uh, this rings a bell of memory what a real write enjoyed this very, very much |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
muted So much honesty and depth in this beautiful poem. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i never got to say "thanks" to everyone for responding with such lovely comments...and "thank you" Martie for finding it on those back pages! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dawn, I just knew that you were a dreamer... Tell you what? If you want to wake up, just holler, and I’ll give ya a pinch But I just assume stay in here a while longer... Deal? Reality... aint all what it’s cracked up to be... This is my favorite of yours  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this reminds me of how I used to write when I was younger great piece...fantastic! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Richy:  im so glad you like this! i thought it was rather pretty and dreamy too..but you know something about reality thats better than dreaming....TOUCH. so i may need that pinch one day soon!Ms. shadows: thank you for always having something nice to say to me..i like your poetry so much and its wonderful to have you visit my blue boxes. thank you! |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
was told that even angels couldn't fly with clipped wings. But I just had to try. lovely poem. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hoping to lose my footing and let all just swallow me whole. I know the feeling, Dawn hugs M |
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Bohemianaus Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 69Australia (South Gippsland) |
This is a delightful write, thankyou God bless and keep you, Namaste! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
thanks you guys! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Was going to prove you wrong but i was always better at mistakes than promises. Falling is easier when you close your eyes. Too bad blind doesn't feel any better than regret" Those lines where "sucking in my breath" good! "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Muted -- beautiful poem and...good for you! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i didnt expect so many responses! LOLthank you so much for reading! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi muted ... I really liked this poem and have read it several times. It really said something to me. I'm just going to plunge into something deeper than numb. That 'something' is called denial and avoidance. I've been spending a lot of time there lately! Maybe we can hang out together. Hugs sweetie ... Marti I take no credit for my poems. Although I write them, I feel |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Marti: *giggle* its nice to have a buddy with me...but then that means we are BOTH feeling crappy...and of course, i dont want you to feel bad! we'll just hug each other back to normal!thank you! |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
~Dawn, Thank you for noticing me missing...I have been caught up in uninspiring work stuff...But, I have not seen any poems from you since this very poignant, honest and powerful poem, and wondered how you are doing with all you have been dealing with....  ~Paul |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I'm just going to plunge into something deeper than numb Hi Dawn, how I missed this beauty the first time around, I don't know!! You painted a beautiful picture, lady. And this last part is so cute!! (Hey, I've been missing you too.) Hugs Ethel |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
hi there! i havent written anything since writing "Deluge before the Requiem"....i think ive been a bit lazy...but im doing just fine..and life still passes one day at a time..and im glad you are back |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
HI ethel! you just slipped in there! thank you for the compliment...and thank you for welcoming back our choshi! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Dawn A wonderful piece of writing with fabulous imagery. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
"....i think ive been a bit lazy...but im doing just fine..and life still passes one day at a time..and im glad you are back "one day at a time, just that way....glad to know you are doing fine....and thank you for your warm welcome back, its good to be here... ~P |
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