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Open Poetry #31

Wisdom from a Deathbed

Adonis Cross
Junior Member

since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

0 posted 2004-03-03 11:23 AM

My candle held a single light--
I wasn't one to burn both ends.
Throughout my life, I didn't fight
Conventions, like my friends.

I warned them all, "Don't waste your plume--
A hasty end will surely come!
To court and tempt a certain doom
So heedlessly is dumb!"

They didn't care--they laughed and went
The way of sinful decadence;
Their every flame was quickly spent,
As final consequence.

My solitary light remained,
And burned with slow and steady poise.
Continually, I abstained
From poison, earthly joys.

And now, my candle barely glows--
I'll soon be on another plane.
I've thought about my path, and those
Who took a shorter lane.

I'm sure their souls have gone below,
While mine will venture near the sun...
And since this is the case, I know
They'll have a lot more fun.

Adonis Cross
Junior Member

since 2003-04-07

Posts 46
Miami, FL, USA

1 posted 2004-03-03 11:37 AM

hmmm, no replies...is this not as good as i thought it was?

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-03-03 11:38 AM

this was so honest...so from great love of the heart....thank you for sharing...sending many hugs.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-03-03 07:15 PM

LOL, well, you may have the last laugh
or the last regret?
Enjoyed this heartfelt honest look in the mirror.

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

4 posted 2004-03-03 09:52 PM

adonis,
   I've found that lack of responses doesn't
necessarily indicate whether a poem is good or not.  Some of the best poets and poetesses I know often have few responses, perhaps because their work is so complete and needs no response, perhaps because the poetry speaks on more levels than read, I'm not sure of the reason.  (Most of the time, I read a lot of poetry that I simply can not respond to at work when I steal a half a minute here and there.)  I'm sure there are people who read your poems and like them very much as I did when I just read it.  Next time I stop in, I'll try to
tell you more specifically what I like about
your poem.   Axed by the clock again,
                  Sadelite

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